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Lie To Me

Lies hold me here
In your prison
Empty inside

This time
Open my eyes

My heart aches
Empty inside

A contest entry

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  • Sashaness
    January 9, 2008

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    I think...

    That to see one of your poems that is this short is another wow(keeping in mind I've only read a hand full of them). Usually you have so much to say! Well for such a short poem you have surly jam packed with greatness. Hmmm I think the subject is a little bit on the cliched side. I didnt really feel it until I got to the last two lines. I loved the first three though! and the followign two...which i guess would mean that I loved everythig but the last two lines...Yeah well I did enjoy reading it! As I do many of your others. Well done.

    Oh and I agree very deep and thought provoking. My favorite kind. I love cryptic.


  • mysticstorm gold member
    December 15, 2007

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    Very delightful wirte. Deep and thought provoking.
    Strong and heart felt sorrow.
    Thank you for entering!


  • delightfulmess silver member
    December 14, 2007

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    Oh this is very profound and dramatic... Well done
    Best of luck to you in the contest.


    Delila