I swallowed his song
its voice
shivered leaves
within me
Author notes
10 words (the voice of God)
In a list
A contest entry
- a sparrow's voice- 3 hours by Cat.
500 points, ended December 12, 2007, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Beyond words
You steal the words from the poets of the Ancients. You are amazingly captivating, my friend!
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You always have a way of putting words together to make me "sigh" Well done, Robin. Nice to read your stuff again.
Cheryl
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This poem is very short, yet beautifully woven.. It brings images to ones mind.. Beautiful written.. And it was worth that gold
Keep writing dear friend..
Love,
~ Lonely
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short but bold
dear robin! its been a while... a beautiful impact ornated by meaningful words. well worth a gold my friend gald to se you're still touching hearts with those gentle words of yours
the poem brings out a whole array of thoughts and a vision of autumn with its gloomy ye mysterious appearence
a beauty indeed
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Oh, this is truly beautiful. Absolutely stunning. It actually brought some emotion up for me and hardly any poems do that anymore...either it is the trend in the prose world of poetry or it is me...but this one is really powerful.
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Well written and felt throughout its ten wordsemotional introspective meaning
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Clearly a gold winning piece. Beautiful verse expresses the reverence one feels or would if hearing the voice of the divine.
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Thank you my sweet friend.
See you soon.
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Congratulations on the gold!! Interpretation of a piece like this leaves me with a very contented feeling. Good to see you gracing the pages of AP again my friend.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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Oh. Really cool! Just a small amount of words and so much impact. This is like the perfect Autumn poem don't you think? I loved it. I stopped and pictured that and I just thought it was so beautiful. You really deserved the gold on this one. You did a wonderful job.
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Wow. So much beauty in these few lines, and so many original images in a small whole. I can feel so much in this one.
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The anvil that is spring shatters beneath summer? Who are we to question winter? That's why the colors of Autumn warm us of its demise. Every season is a lure that guts its' former selve...
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This was sensual and chilling, in just ten words as well--that shows a true passion for poetry. I was looking for new poems to comment on and voila!
Well-penned, short and expressive.
Peace, Love & Light,
Jay
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In so few words you are able tell of something so moving...
Your talent and your strength are an inspiration to me Robin. May God always sing to you my friend
Love and roses
Larry
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Thank you my dear friend. I definately heard his song that day
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Love the undertones here (pun not intended).
Leaves of the "Tree of Life"...indeed...
Hugs and Happy Holidays...Eddy
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Thank you Eddy! It's so good to see you again. Merry Christmas to you.
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Nice descriptions!
This is very poetic.I enjoyed the read!
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Oh this is absolute perfection... the title, each word ...it is like an epiphany to read them...bright, sensory-filled exactness. Bravo!!!! and congratulations.
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Thank you so much.
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Simply beautiful. Such little words say speeches in my mind
hank you for sharing.
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I really love the imagery and the feeling this poem brings across to the reader - and I see you won a gold cup with it congratulations with a most fabulous write!
Leander
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And oh yes... the title "small lyric" - yes!!!
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Ohhhhhh - this is so very beautiful, Robin!!! Wow, I'm going to steal this one from you. Yes, you have a song (didn't I tell you that?). Wonderful, tight, powerful, yet gentle piece you've written here - the song inside of you makes my leaves quiver too. I absolutely love it and I'm so glad Mary saw it's beauty too - but I knew she would!! Beautiful beautiful, my liewe vriendin . Congrats on the gold - this is pure golden poetry.
~ Nicolette
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Thank you my vriendin. I'm so happy you want to steal this one
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Breathtaking..
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Thank you
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You, m'Dear, are anything but small. You are larger than Life, my Friend. So is this incredible poem. Congratulations on the gold, Robin. Winning one from Mary is definitely a feat to be savored. Well done, Sweetie. Wanda
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Thank you my dear friend. I was truly honored.
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How did I miss this?
Gold was never in question...
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Thanks Kathleen.
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Excellent metaphor. Congrats.
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Thank you
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beautiful! I love the brevity and depth of this piece!
this piece epitomizes meaningful poetry, and in spite of its length there is such breadth and beauty to these descriptions!
lovely!
congratulations on a well deserved gold! you earned it!
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oh my goodness.. this is beautiful-
i don't have words.. it is just simply beautiful..
m
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