Eyes that sparkle
like a lake bathed in
the shimmering moonlight
and kissed by the star's bright light
Holding you in
my loving embrace
makes me smile and warms me
making it hard to let go
I love you more
now than when we met
and it grows more each day
filling me with joy and hope
Now sitting here
as I write this poem
with love overflowing
I long to be close to you
and to keep you safe from all harm
With each passing
moment wondering
if your thinking about
me as much as I do you
and missing me as I miss you
We have had a
lot of ups and downs
but have always come back
to each other still in love
but it seems stronger than before
You are a big
part of my life now
and I could not see you
looking at anyone else
with your loving beautiful eyes
Eyes that sparkle
like a lake bathed in
the shimmering moonlight
and kissed by the star's bright light
Holding you in
my loving embrace
makes me smile and warms me
making it hard to let go
I love you more
now than when we met
and it grows more each day
filling me with joy and hope
Author notes
I just came up with this it is a cyclone that I wanted to make not to anyone but I am sure some people have this with someone I hope you like it
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Beautiful
I absalutly loved this
And surprizingly i was thinking of only
one person the inter time i was reading this
I wonder if he is thinking of me now...
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Enchantingly..
sweet and inspiring. seem's someones
been bitten by the love bug.
Love is a wonderful thing when shared
with mutual consent. All relationships have
peeks and valleys but as long as you keep
the sparks of romance and passion alive
you will always be nurtured. Blessings
to you and yours
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I loved reading this. Those who are in love will float through every word with a smile, and for those who are yet to find it, it gives a sense of hope.
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I think the first stanza could be reworked so you aren't repeating moonlight/bright light. I think it interupts the flow of your piece. I like that you bring the poem into the very present with "Now sitting here/as I write this poem." It makes the love something that is going on right now and not just something I am remembering. I enjoyed your piece.
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Lovely
Robin, your love poetry grows more lovely with each
one you write. I've read so much of your beautiful love poetry, and with each new piece, they seem to intensify in their emotion and beauty. You always write particulary well in this form, but as its creator, you're obviously comfortable with it, and are the consumate master of the Cyclone. This touched me more than mere words could express; simply beautiful!
Paula
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Very well done! You have a romantic voice and your style and technicals are all great. It needs very little polishing, as it is put together so well.
Wolfie -
A beautiful poem and a delight to read. It was a gem.
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Cyclone lands leaving beauty
Yes, many people have parts of this type of love and your poetry brings it to the page and makes it containable. A few spelling errors to tend to so it won't distract from the intensity of your write.
wright should be write, your should be you"re (you are), eles should be else, loveing should be loving. It is reasonable that spelling gets lost when one is in the poetic zone.
Teoche -
I realised I've already visited your poem but once again I was struck by the lovely sentiment especially 'I love you more now than when we met' showing the progressive nature of gentle love
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I loved this poem. Very well written, and full of nice emotion. Great word flow and choice of words also. Great job, keep it up.
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how romantic and touching thats a truly beautiful, breathtaking piece. its almost as if the emotion is coming out of the screen at me
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Very Nice
A very nice romantic poem with a wonderful mood. Great job and best of luck in your writing future. -
Please meet Mr. Spellcheck. Also, I think you intend "filling" instead of "feeling" (Mr. Spellcheck won't catch that one). "Stars" should be possessive (i.e., meet Mr. Apostrophe). It's not clear why "sparkle" is capitalized. Clean up these problems and let's see a revision. Cheers!
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I love it!!!!!!!!!
This sounds like me and my boyfriend i just love it!!!!!
"Holding you in
my loving embrace
makes me smile and warms me
making it hard to let go
I love you more
now than when we met
and it grows more each day
feeling me with joy and hope
Now siting here
as I wright this poem
with love overflowing
I long to be close to you
and to keep you safe from all harm
With each passing
moment wondering
if your thinking about
me as much as I do you
and missing me as I miss you"
these seem to say it the most about us
I'm really glad you have written this cause I have been looking all over AP for a poem like our love.....
Keep writing my friend
Stevie
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This is a lovely and romantic poem.
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Gosh this is so heartfelt I thought it was dedicated to someone very special. The sentiments flow with simplicity and sincerity, very refreshing. Hope you don't mind me pointing out there are a few typo errors. Lovely read!
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Wow!!
Ok Mister...Where in the WORLD have You been
Now back to this Beautiful emotional piece that tugs at the Heartstrings~~
Love just oozes from Your words~~
Hope You are doing Wonderful my son~~
and Miss You bunches!!
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit
Best wishes to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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