When she reached her hand to touch the box,
A whim, a curiosity to see what gift
Might follow fire, she felt a clutch of fear
As if the gods’ fell decree already
Had the power to quell all hope before
Mortal-kind was forced to cope with ills.
I reach toward my private box of shadows
And feel the premonition shake my core,
Knowing the predestined shocks must come
But feeling still that stillborn quake of hope
She must have felt…the pent-up hitch of breath
Before the flying furies pitch me down.
And for that instant, I would too withdraw,
Live in ignorance of fire if that
Would spare me from the ills pursuing me;
Indeed, withdraw my hand, retire untried,
Within the shadow-box content to live,
And not reveal the furies pent within.
A contest entry
- "The time has come," the Walrus said, "To talk of many things" by HeavenScent4U.
700 points, ended December 21, 2007, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Excellent write ~
Nice take on your Prompt, and nicely done with lots of imagery and emotion going on ~
Congrats on the Silver,
Bear ~
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Wow, can anyone say intense? lol As I read this my heartbeat raced. This was so full of raw emotion and desperation and so vivid with imagery, very intense. The rules called for 15 lines thus, the 9 points for rules, other than that, no qualms here
Thanks for this powerhouse of an entry and good luck. Be well and be blessed
Excellent job!
rules 9
presentation 10
spelling, grammar, puncuation 20
originality 20
how well you handeled the prompt 20
overall 20
99 points
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So guess whose ancient eyes read 18 instead of 15...that will teach me to write so late at night. Sorry. But thanks for the points and the response.
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your eyes and mine both have the same problem
geesh if mine get any worse i won't be able to see my hand in front of my face lol
i really do need to get my eye glasses instead of these reading glasses lol
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Your prompt is:
shadow box
You have until December 20th to complete your entry. Good luck to you. Be well and be blessed
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