It’s so stupid
How a boy can make me feel that way;
Make me think,
After grabbing my arm to stop me,
“Did his hand linger longer than usual,
Or was it just my excited nerves,
Tingling at his touch?”
It’s so stupid
That any simple gesture,
A smile, a wave,
Can make me regress to that 8 year old girl
Drawing hearts
And writing ‘Mrs. Prince Charming’
On the pages of her diary.
It’s so stupid
That I can be taking notes
To the outside world
But really,
I’m swinging open the front door
And discovering him on my doorstep
Holding a dozen red roses.
I’m so stupid
Because I can picture myself being that girl
That beautiful girl
Who walks with him hand-in-hand
When I know
The only roses he’ll ever give me
Are yellow.
Author notes
This is option 3
A contest entry
- Is It Lust, Love, Or Complete Infatuation ? PW allowed :] by innocence jaded.xx.
420 points, ended June 30, 2008, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Perfect.
I really liked this poem. I can relate so well, especially right now. Your words are so true and I loved how you're comparing it to when you were younger and the whole "Prince Charming" thing. Very creative structure. I also like the repetition of "it's so stupid", because it's like you know that how you feel about him isn't going to change anything. I know this feeling all too well. I don't know if this was personal for you or not, but it definitely hit a cord with me.
I think the first stanza was my absolute favorite, but the whole poem was absolutely incredible. Thanks for entering :] <3
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The middle two stanzas are my favorites. It's so weird...I read this poem and the whole time I was like, meh. And then I finished it and I was like, wow, what a read! Delayed appreciation or something, lol. But really, I loved it. Nice job!
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I love this poem you wrote. I feel this way, too--distracting myself from reality to live in my dreams and realizing they probably won't come to be.
I especially like the third stanza, your dream scenario and then the transition into the fourth stanza--reality.
Great write. I enjoyed reading and I hope our dreams become realities someday.
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I like it. I write like this alot..can't wait to get what you know may be coming...Is there something significant about yellow roses? anyways great job..THank you and good luck in the contest!
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This is not quite what I expected when I initially saw the title, but a fascinating write and use of words here. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you. Keep that pen handy dear poet.
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I love it. This some-what describes the same situation I am in. Will it ever evolve into something more? Who knows... Great write
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good write. i was glued
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Yeah, I know that situation all too well. I liked this poem very much, i thought it said very well what there was to say...
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Ohhh
What a powerful poem....The last stanza is a great closer. A great depictment of what it's like to be stuck as only friends with someone when you're longing for so much more. That situation is all too familiar to me...great, great write.
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