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The ice sculptor

 

My heart's

a hot spring
in a winter blue pot;

a fire burning

within an igloo,
he’s an ice sculptor

sensing shape

within medium.

His passion

sees my form

clearly

like snow

in the orange glow

of lamplight

and feels my warmth

while his hands

craft me a lantern.




















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  • Danny Beatty gold member
    April 1, 2008

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    two silvers ... two golds would be more like it

    link this one


    superb from top to bottom ... a perfect, cool poem

    i love your title, i love the idea of form with a shape which appears stubborn but melts and gives way to the sharpness of desire ... this is entirely sensual and beautiful... i am very happy to read this poem.

    another publishable poem



  • individuality gold member
    March 3, 2008

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    lots of colour here embedded in the stark white of the background and title - that initially gives a cold feel but the colour adds warmth once you get past that - i think of that film groundhog day where he does the sculpture of her, i will be romantic here lol her boat race


  • Sanguinarius
    March 3, 2008
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    This is an awesome write. Congrats on your win ~Bret~


  • Randomly Beautiful
    March 3, 2008

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    This is beautiful. I love the thought of Winter and this definitely brought that to mind with wonderful imagery and a sultry tone.


  • Swan song gold member
    January 8, 2008
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    Oh my! You are a very sensual writer! My oh my I am speechless!


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    January 5, 2008

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    Oh, the soft sensual tone of this piece, literally melted my heart. What treasure is this, which I have found?


  • Annalise
    December 26, 2007

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    Lantern... such a poetic word, I think. One would think they would find it often in poetry, but such isn't the case. It works splendidly here.

    There is something here that speaks "finished", "polished", "poetry".

    Nice.


  • Blue Rew silver member
    December 18, 2007

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    I agree with Zayra, lantern is a word that expresses so much...a soft light, a guiding source, a comfort when all else seems cold. This is overflowing with
    emotion and strength of expression. Blue


  • Heart Sutra
    December 16, 2007

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    "lantern" is such a wonderful word

    beautiful poem....


  • sheltered
    December 14, 2007
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    Some of those ice scultures are truly amazing
    as was this. Great job on the prompt.


  • Mezclita
    December 14, 2007

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    I feel ya!

    Great form for this piece. A good take on the prompt. Like the clear comparisons used. Very effective The second part is especially beautiful... gl!


  • zochit2me gold member
    December 13, 2007

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    Well aren't you just inspired by this winter weather

    What a since of longing yet soothing I get from this poem. It flows so nice like melting winter ice flowing from a mountain in early spring.

    I wish you luck here in this contest.

    Becky

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    December 13, 2007

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    Beautifully written,the poetess introduces a medium herself of sculpting and shapes something momemtous with words that should be in opposition,the ice and the heat,yet they meld and produce magical poetry.Loved where you creatively took the reader via the prompt of the contest and produced the purity of passion.Absolutely wonderfully excellent.


  • naked roots
    December 13, 2007

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    The metaphor in this is wonderfully done. This must be some love and I bet this ice sculptor feels very special to have found the flame that burns inside the igloo. It's almost like finding treasure.
    Excellent.


  • BurmaShave
    December 13, 2007
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    Picking myself up off of the floor

    This is absolutely stunning! I feel like I'm at Borders reading from a volume of classic poetry.


  • arafura gold member
    December 12, 2007

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    a hot spring...

    Now this is sensual! For some reason it reminds me a little of the movie "Ghost". I will have to take up ice sculpting if this is the response that ice sculptors get! Good luck in the contest!


  • Tam
    December 12, 2007

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    be still my heart...

    wow...this is powerful poetry beautiful...
    you are a master at creating striking imagery...that falls softly on the mind...but lasting long after the reader departs your page...
    I will wear this image for days...
    stellar writing...
    I WANT TO BE JUST LIKE YOU WHEN I GROW UP!
    love it...
    Blessings! Tammy

  • Virgoan
    December 12, 2007

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    The fire and ice used as metaphors of emotion created a wonderful imagery. The point of view represented in this piece is balance and surely made a reader want for more.

    Excellent as always.

    Thank you very much for sharing the magnificence of this poem.

    HENSLEY


  • Namita
    December 12, 2007
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    sigh... you are unbelievable


  • Mad Moon silver member
    December 12, 2007

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    Beautiful! Amazing imagery, and expert use of metaphor. Just WOW! I can't even chose a favorite line, they are all so perfectly executed. I have to admit, the whole poem is absolutely superb. I adore the metaphors, especially "a hot spring in a blue winter pot..." Marvelous!! I bow to your abundant talent, my friend. Brava!!


  • Blueskywonder
    December 12, 2007

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    What a wonderful piece of poetry... so romantic and dreamy in content and imagery.
    This is a fantastic piece!Bravo!!


  • delightfulmess silver member
    December 12, 2007

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    ~silence~ followed by roaring applause....
    WOW!!!!!!!!!! What a write....

    Whistles~ Showers in roses.

    You are one of the best... Good luck in the contest.


    Love,
    Delila


  • ellipsist
    December 12, 2007

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    lovely! very vivid imagery! I love the colors - they bring this piece to life so well, and the sensations of both cold and warmth!

    beautiful!


  • misselaineous
    December 12, 2007
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    lovely imagery

  • Suzanne Dia
    December 12, 2007

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    you just warmed me up mucho

    this is really beautiful.

    must be some kind of love to inspire this.



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