Slowly the blood drips
one drop at a time
life has changed at
the drop of a dime
To much pain,
to many worries
I feel like going insane.
So I take control
cutting slowly across my wrists
tearing at my very soul
Releasing years of pent up anger
of unrecognized danger
with every drop that falls...
I am finally in control
Author notes
feelings...
A contest entry
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sweety..
blood aint ever teh answer
im sorry taht you felt like this -
thanks for entering my contest
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I used to feel like I was in control
when I was cutting, but now...
I was spinning OUT of control.
You spoke words that are difficult to say,
but penned them down for us to relate to,
comment on, or even just to read
and understand how you feel.
Thanks for entering. Good luck.
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Suicide is always a good idea.
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I like the rhytm's in it. And it gives me a new perspective. Very good
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this is good
a good way and a better way of expressing your pain
good luck
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This is good.. i'm not really one for cutting.. but this isnt bad.. and i promise that my views on it wont hinder you in the contest.. good write and good luck..
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With every word that I read
I could feel your pain
It is sad to hear these words
and I know its hard to explain
I'm glad you are expressing
and letting them go
And quit all that cutting
and finally take control
I know that you are stronger
and that you and God are never apart
So take a step, look to Him
and let Him restore your heart
You are a beautiful princess
that God has created
There are no acronyms to describe
they are not abbreviated
You are beautiful my friend
you have so much potential
YOu have a lot to give to us
because you are so influential
So take a hold of your life
and let Jesus guide your heart
Because when He is in control
your life will never fall apart
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Wow! This poem is truly depressing and sad.
I'm sorry that you feel like this. You did a wonderful job with it though. *cries* Keep up the wonderful work and best wishes to you in the contest.
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