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The Dark Black Forrest

The stench of rancid rotting flesh lured me,
into the Deep Black Forrest of Darkness.

There was this gruesome Leprechaun running free,

with evil powers that was only posed by he.

His teeth were fangs like a serpent, his eyes were red as blood,

his hands were that of a werewolf,  his body fluids seeped as if it were mud.

He would asphyxiate you with his kindness,

then horripilate you with his fear.

For everytime he would get near you,

a sense of abdominal would appear.

Obsolete  nerves jumped  when he was there,

for a pile of cadaverous victims ,was scattered everywhere.

Eating all of their intestines and slurping down their blood,

seem to enhance his powers ,unbeknownst to some.

These were the lucky one's dead and felt no pain,

for he held a special place , for live victims just the same.

If they raised his violent anger , he would  do this while they breathed,

as he ravenously  sucked their blood out , you would see their color leave.

He also had a dark craving, that filled his taste-buds right,

the live one's would be screaming as he popped the eyeballs whites.

He ate them with a passion, as the live one's fears increased,

he would then throw back his head and laugh and shoot fire as he breathed.

The final phase was water,  in a pond so black and full of drear,

it was full of his of piranhas, they smelled your flesh as you neared.

I suddenly realized I liked  this and ask him could I stay,

He bestowed on me his powers in a very evil way.

He made me eat intestines and slurp down their blood,

and even gnawed my foot off but yet I understood.

We consumated our marriage and evil still reigns on,

to come into your dreams and bring your nightmare on.

 

 

 

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  • leander Moderators member
    January 17, 2008
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    I really like the eerieness (if that is even a word) of this piece it's quite a dark fairytale, but you used very good imagery with it Rhyme is perfect, flow a bi staggering but overall you did great with this

    Thank for this entry as well!
    Leander


  • Naridill
    January 13, 2008

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    The eerie darkness is perfect. Its strong imagery but feels like it should be prose or formatted a little more spacey.

    Thanks for entering.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    January 1, 2008

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    Thank you very much for your wonderful entry. Very well penned indeed. Best of luck in my contest and a very Happy New Year!


  • kennethlaney
    December 14, 2007

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    Very good

    Evil , Wild and Wicked, I liked this but Leprechauns are too small for eating some of the larger asses we have in this world! Hey Cherry.
    "BOO"


  • TheClimb
    December 12, 2007

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    WOW Mama, I love this piece...you toldpoetically told a story which scared me just a lil bit, but me like it nonetheless!


  • crimsondew
    December 12, 2007
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    Devil has arrived..lol

    Well written..All the best!


  • Maybe.I.Am.Broken.
    December 12, 2007
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    oops, i meant not in caps, that looks tacky now.....


  • Maybe.I.Am.Broken.
    December 12, 2007

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    interesting.....

    *DEVIL**DEVIL**DEVIL* I liked this piece, a bit of spook and a little smidge of nature there, very well written, thanks for entering.

    Best of luck in my contest,
    Annie Shadows...............








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  • machine
    December 12, 2007
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    Interesting

    Very interestin I belive. nice job.


  • Angel Wings1960
    December 12, 2007

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    Wow! This is gross. You can write like this but you are afraid of ghosts.Your description is very detailed of things going on. Good luck in the contest.


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    December 12, 2007

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