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Dirty Kitchens

 



They have become more than I;
Velvet soft and bright white
strung and draped in honor.

So boiled and thoroughly pierced
I can no longer hear them;
and the community jar echoes empty.

I skittered and bounced my escape,
peering from behind the sugar bowl ~
Remembering the cornfields of my youth.

Daddies had a bit too much Christmas cheer
and mama's looking lucky -

Not at all ready to clean any messes.

I envy them… all together, circling the tree.
will they ever remember their old destinies;
or miss me, when the counter is clean?








Author notes

prompt: personify an unpopped kernel of corn

A contest entry

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  • Solo Wisp gold member
    December 21, 2007

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    Outstanding

    This would be my pick for Gold as well! Congrats to the man in a league all by himself!

    -Steve


  • Arkbear gold member
    December 21, 2007
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    Woo Hoo.......Cool!

    Congrats on the Gold


  • Arkbear gold member
    December 21, 2007
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    .maybe it's my keyboard :)


  • Arkbear gold member
    December 21, 2007
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    ....good luck,


  • Arkbear gold member
    December 21, 2007
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    Great job Dude,


  • Arkbear gold member
    December 21, 2007
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    Crazy button ~


  • HeavenScent4U
    December 21, 2007
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    opps sorry, forgot the kids `


    • Idle Mind Wondering silver member
      December 21, 2007
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      that's funny, I didn't make the lurking connection lol. but you are right I am glad you liked.

  • HeavenScent4U
    December 21, 2007

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    I love where you took this. A lot of emotion within your words, very fine job. See even in your poem you were lurking Thanks for your wonderful entry and good luck. Be well and be blessed

    Excellent job!

    rules 10
    presentation 10
    spelling, grammar and punctuation 20
    originality 20
    how well you handled the prompt 20
    overall 20

    100 points


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    December 18, 2007
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    Oh My!

    OH! This is excellent. I believe I did spy you, just behind that sugar bowl, as I came pushing clutter and squirting my 409.

    Great personification, great escape. Well done. Best of luck in this round. (love the background) ~Pamela

  • HeavenScent4U
    December 14, 2007
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    Your prompt is:

    an unpopped kernel of popcorn

    You have until December 20th to complete your entry. Good luck. Be well and be blessed


  • raggyann
    December 12, 2007
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    waiting for what
    lol this was realy good
    i liked this


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    December 12, 2007

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    ...hmmmm....had I known..... LOL
    Looks like I have my work cut out for me.

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