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Tears of Sorrow

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Tears of Sorrow

Blackened wings and tears of sorrow
send me to this darkened morrow.
Cast from heaven and thrones of kings;
tears of sorrow and blackened wings.

To seal my fate, I must resign
condemned to live as lowly swine.
Cast from heavens golden gate,
I must resign to seal my fate.

From glory I have been set free
O ravens will you welcome me?
Once you hear my woeful story;
I have been set free from glory.

O darkened raven I am so scared,
I’m cast away and no one cared.
Take me in please give me haven,
I am so scared, O darkened raven.

Tears of sorrow and blackened wings.
Condemned to live with mortal strings,
flightless as a broken arrow.
Blackened wings and tears of sorrow.

 

 

 

Author notes

Art work by: Victoria Francés

 

Swap Quatrain:
Each stanza in the poem must be a quatrain (four lines) where the first line is reversed in the fourth line. In addition, line 2 must rhyme with line 1, and line 3 must rhyme with line 4 and so on, BUT not repeat the same rhyming pattern on subsequent stanzas.
Rhyming patterns: AABB, CCDD, or ABAB, CDCD and so on.
The Swap Quatrain was created by Lorraine M. Kanter.

 

 

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  • Swan song gold member
    December 24, 2007

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    You were feeling this so much! The poem fits the pciture and can be incrperated to self. This could be a song!


  • Never Fall in Love
    December 14, 2007

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    You know wherever I see sad content I must click. The urge builds up even more when it's from someone who writes good.
    When someone who writes excellent writes in my taste [like you] there is no stopping my comment.

    This is personally one of my favourite forms, including your creation the swap couplet - which is in my opinion, absolutely magnificent. I should learn to spell that.

    Do I need say more? This is Brilliant!
    And even if you didn't do well n the contest, you're bound to do better in other contests with this same write - it's as brilliant as that.

    Never ♥


  • second-born
    December 14, 2007

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    This is so beautiful with its sincere sadness and its lovely take on the form...words were intricately woven to create a poem more precious than a silk cloth...bless you always!!!


  • Swan song gold member
    December 13, 2007
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    You never cease to amaze me with your dedication and talent I enjoyed this rhythm and rhyme rich pm that was so well formed


    • Amera gold member
      December 13, 2007
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      Thanks Jeff; it didn't do very well in the contest


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    December 13, 2007

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    Oh wow... this took my breath away.

    Love the poem and the picture.
    I am speechless. Anything I would write about it would pale in comparison to the beauty of this piece.


  • Ithica silver member
    December 13, 2007

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    This is a really great poem!!! It tell a dark a mysterious story. It is beautifully inspoired bt the artwork, and the form adds more dimesion... Bravo on this one!!! (I need MORE than three clappies!!!)


  • poettrical
    December 13, 2007
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    Beautiful, captivating, mysterious!


  • Desire gold member
    December 12, 2007

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    Wow!!

    Love this form You have penned...
    You are so good at these

    Beautifully done!!
    One can feel the emotions exuded~~
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

  • Eulb kcalB
    December 12, 2007
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    beautifully sad I enjoyed reading it.


  • Tarja
    December 12, 2007

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    OOOOH JEEZ! This is going to be such a hard contest to judge! This was an amazing entry! I love the detailed imagery and the rhyme scheme! It was all just divine! Your take on this painting was an outstanding one. Thank you so much for this magnificent entry!!! Good luck!


  • ellipsist
    December 12, 2007

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    beautiful! a musical flow to this! intense and fantastical imagery! dark and saddening, but enchanting nonetheless!


  • PerVirtuous
    December 12, 2007

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    How do you make the dark works so attractive? It is a gift, I guess. This is one fantastic image, and the construction of the form flawless. Looks like a winner to me.

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