Wet streets reflect
cold and damp sorrow;
mirroring a blackened sky,
stealing warm winds
from thickening air.
Streaming cars fly
by like gusts of
fire lampyrids,
faces ~
arranged like
zombies under sugar moons,
melting away brain cells.
Hands...
swollen fingers,
frozen touch;
they are my hands
covering an
invisible hole in my chest,
listening, waiting,
wondering why cadence
is deafened.
Empty nests
decline to resonate,
where a heart no
longer exists, &
blood runs
dry.
A contest entry
- Another Try!!! by SummerlandRayne.
486 points, ended December 28, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - SNOW by trekkergirl.
600 points, ended August 28, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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okay is this about snow?
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Yes... it's symbolism of being trapped in a snow storm, and also a metaphor of life. did you even really read it?
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Very nice!!! Thanks for the entry!
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WoW! So full of imagery! This really had my attention! Love it! You did a wonderful job on this.
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kool trippy stuff... keep up the grand workings!!
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wow
This was amazing. Lovely imagery! My favourite lines were: 'mirroring a blackened sky,
stealing warm winds
from thickening air'
this was a truly inspiring piece. Can't wait to read more!
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Oh My Word!!
Powerful piece You have versed and what images
brought forth
especially with the lines:
zombies under sugar moons
melting away brain cells..
Wow!!
Grabs hard~~
Wish You only Happiness!!
Thank You for sharing Your Talent Beautiful
Best wishes to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Kerri, this is amazing. I never want to hear you doubt yourself or your writing skills again! I feel thi sway most fo the time nowadays, but with a lot les breath-taking imagery. Fanfuckingtastic job, sweetness! Loan me some talenty goodness, would you?
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Wow this poem was simply amazing in every possible way the imagery was perfect...the words were very descriptive and vivid. awesome job with this. Keep up the excellent work and I hope you have a wonderful Christmas this year.
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I will sure as heck try
Thank you for reading. It means a lot to me 
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