Ride The White Light by Timespell at All poetry

Ride the white light...the devil may care
Inside you scream...but it gets you nowhere
Devil and the angels...laugh to themselves
Engulfing your dreams...inside your own hell

The angels come calling...whiter than snow
How tempted you are...to escape from the show
Eager and willing...but a slave just the same

White lights come flashing...the tease of the chase
Hell calls you back...to this devilish place
Inside this domain...there's no escaping the fact

That you're here for eternity...and that is that
Escape you can never...your soul is all mine

Lucifer, Beelzebub, Satan's my name...and you shall burn
Inside my flames...and feel the power of my pain
God doesn't want you...your crimes on his earth
Have sent you to hell...where you are now cursed
The trip of a lifetime...the worst of the worst

Author notes

2. Write something that rhymes well. And it has to be dark!

ACROSTIC

option 2

"I KNOW THE RULES"

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Luciferschild
January 27

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i think that maybe better word choice would complete this poem, i felt that was the only problem. thank you for entering and good luck
xtayzerx
January 20

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FANTASTIC!!!!!!!
i love it its amazing!!!! perfect write it captures ur view extremly well......u rock keep writing dude u rule!!! xxsilentsuicidexx
theredcatjazzoflove
October 22, 2008

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this was a smooth right dark all that good stuff good luck to you on the contest ok
ears2hearyou
October 16, 2008

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so smartly written...pulling at us..taunting us...
boldly letting go...and letting your ink flow!
well done!
cautious warning wisely done through out this poem!
Powerful ink in your soul!
ears/Seattle
thankyou for your entry into hell.
fairytalelovestory
October 15, 2008
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ty and gl
georgie
September 30, 2008

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a fantastic piece...All the luck in the contest altho im sure u wont need it. a brilliant write.
xxx
SmokinHotWhiteTiger
September 28, 2008

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Wow
Hello there I am a judge for the contest Project Un-Cliche and anyways this is a mighty fine powerful dark poem here and I am absolutely blown away by the whole concept of this poem. anyw ays I really found myself in awe at this poem and how incredibly powerful this write is. anyw ays excellent insight and congratulations on winning numerous trophies for your wirte here. any ways great work and good luck in the contest(s).
Nostalgic Moon
August 19, 2008
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woah this is wonderful! i expecially love the last line =) great write
hey charlie
April 26, 2008

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Nicely written. I'm not a fan of rhyme but I did enjoy this since it actually told a story rather than being a bunch of pretty words slapped on a page. Thanks for entering.
xxRainbowDawnxx
March 24, 2008

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The first stanza speaks the most to me... It's the way I've often felt when contimplating how others and ultimately hell and heaven see me. They do mock me, I really do believe so whenever I'm happy, they tear it from me, whenever I'm sad they laugh. But that's me, the pesimist.
- Timespell
  March 25, 2008
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  LOL, I can say that would piss me off too, if that was the case.
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
herrlurch
March 24, 2008

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Once again, well done!
especially since I did not get the acrostic idea myself. Good idea, good transfer. Some typos with to and too, however (l. 6, 9). Fine.
- Timespell
  March 24, 2008
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  Thanks... Like I have mentioned in the past, you will find my typos here and there from time to time. Thanks for bringing them to my attention.
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
Nikki Rowles
March 16, 2008

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wow this is the first acrostic that I have ever liked....well then...that right there gets kudos....
- Timespell
  March 16, 2008
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  Thanks for reading and commenting on my poem. Glad you found my Acrostic to your liking.
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
DestiniesTwined
March 8, 2008
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I like this. Thanks for entering my contest, and I wish you much luck.
- Timespell
  March 8, 2008
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  Thanks for reading and commenting on my poem. Glad you like it.
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
BlankSillhouette
March 1, 2008

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thanks for entering this into the contest. The topic was very interesting and the flow throughout the piece was far above what i expected. The rhyme wasn't forced in this, and the feeling of it was amazing. The regret and ending was arguably open-ended and trajic, but absolutely necessary! This was an amazing piece and good luck in the contest. Best wishes.

xBlankSillhouetteX
- Timespell
  March 2, 2008
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  Thanks for reading and commenting on my poem. I would say this is one of my personal favorites. So I am glad you liked this one.
  
  All the be
  
  ~T.S~
know one
February 28, 2008
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ARSOME!
great exacly what I was after
- Timespell
  February 28, 2008
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  Thanks for reading. Glad this what you was after for your contest.
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
Count Orlok
February 10, 2008
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Why not choose an original title?
- Timespell
  February 11, 2008
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  I suppose I could of called this "Ride the white light"
  
  Thanks for reading and commenting.
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
SchizoChic
January 11, 2008

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Wow!
I really enjoyed reading this. I like it alot. I can see the imagery in my head as the words flow so freely. I am impressed. Very good job. Good luck in the contest.
- Timespell
  January 12, 2008
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  Thanks...
  
  Yes a nice look into the depths of HELL...
  
  Thanks again for reading and commenting.
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
chromedevil
January 11, 2008
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thankyou for entering our contest best of luck to you
- Timespell
  January 12, 2008
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  Thanks for reading and commenting on this 'Dark Piece'
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
askmyname0
January 8, 2008

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a very insightful poem showing much to encounter ,makes the goodie look a little bad for turning his back on some .
- Timespell
  January 8, 2008
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  Thanks for reading this one, Yes not a nice place to end up in, is it...LOL
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
parntsoftwins
January 3, 2008

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I liked this one, the description of the torments of hell. Well written.

Inside my flames...and feel the power of my pain
God doesn't want you...your crimes on his earth
Have sent you to hell...where you are now cursed
The trip of a lifetime...the worst of the worst

This is a great powerful last stanza. I have always felt the last stanza should have the most impact. You have done that well!
- Timespell
  January 3, 2008
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  Thanks
  Thanks for reading this one glad you liked it
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
Georgia La Mariposa
January 1, 2008

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Hi is this in relation to the novel? If so would you consider entering my novel contest, you write such wonderful work I'd love you to enter x
- Timespell
  January 1, 2008
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  Thanks for reading and for the invite.
  
  I will have a look and see if I can come up with something for you.
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
opaqueangel
December 27, 2007

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Awsome writte!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! You did a great job loved every bit of it...Thanks for the entery and good luck!
- Timespell
  December 28, 2007
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  Thanks...
  
  Glad you liked this walk on the Darker side.
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
georgie
December 26, 2007
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as your usual style... the things i love to read. a well deserved silver although personally id give it gold,
hugs,
georgie,
xxx
- Timespell
  December 27, 2007
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  Thanks
  Thanks Georgie,
  
  This had a hidden message to go along with the poem... Don't think anybody saw it. Or even pointed it out.
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
darkangel-darksoul
December 20, 2007
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this is so amazing.. i love it. thanks for your entry
- Timespell
  December 27, 2007
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  Thanks for reading and commenting. I am so glad you thought my poem was "Amazing"
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
LadyDementia
December 20, 2007

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A great poem, rich in darkness, tho a little short you have packed a lot of fab imagery into it. The rhyme is wonderful, just rolls effortlessly of the tongue. You have brought it to a close superbly. Best of luck in my contest.
Pink x
*hug
- Timespell
  December 20, 2007
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  Thanks
  Thanks for reading and leaving a great comment.
  To be totally honest with you, after starting this poem with the first sentence Ride The White Light. I liked that line so much that I formed, and based the rest of the poem on that sentence in an acrostic form. I guess thats why I had to end it the way I did.
  
  Thanks again for reading and commenting.
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
Shamanicmusings
December 20, 2007

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Woah this has wonderful rhyme and metre to start with and the imagery is stunning to boot A well crafted poem by a competant writer. Well done. This is going into my favourites hoard.
- Timespell
  December 20, 2007
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  Thanks for the great comment and for adding this one to your favorites.
  
  Thanks again.
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
ForeverxAlone
December 18, 2007

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Woah.. like.. utterly amazing, leaving me amazed and in awe and ;lsajdf;ljasdf heh this is just too great ^_^
Keeep writing, for the enjoyment of all
The words were amazing and.. yeah.
Have a nice day!! ^_^
- Timespell
  December 18, 2007
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  Thanks a lot for reading and for your great comment...
  
  All the best
  
  ~T.S~
ShadowsMidnightRose
December 17, 2007

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Wow! I am utterly speechless!! The words you chose are perfect, and the format is something that i've never seen. I love this stanza:
White lights come flashing...the tease of the chase
Hell calls you back...too this devilish place
Inside this domain...there's no escaping the fact

That you're here for eternity...and that is that
Escape you can never...your soul is all mine
I love this poem, please keep on writing!
- Timespell
  December 18, 2007
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  Thanks for reading and leaving a great comment...I am glad you liked this style of poetry.
  
  Thanks again
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
- - ShadowsMidnightRose
    December 18, 2007
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    You are very welcome
PsychoticallyInsane
December 17, 2007

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Great poem!! The words play and roll off the tongue! Very well written and the message is so vivid and true! Rock on dude!
- Timespell
  December 17, 2007
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  Thanks for the great Comment on this poem...
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
beryl
December 16, 2007

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Your words are too true..
Well done to capture what we all at times do feel;
But the fight is worth the pain.
- Timespell
  December 17, 2007
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  Thanks for reading this short story
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
piccola
December 15, 2007
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I love the rhyme and flow. Plus it was filled with great images. Thank you so much for this entry
- Timespell
  December 15, 2007
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  Thanks for reading and commenting.
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
CCSUNSHINE x
December 14, 2007

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I am actually reading this book in school at the moment.

I love this poem,
I love how you used the different names for satan.
- Timespell
  December 14, 2007
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  Thanks for reading and commenting...Hope you enjoyed this short look at Hell.
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
WhyNot
December 12, 2007

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Nice job. I like this poem...kind of creepy. I like the title as well!
- Timespell
  December 13, 2007
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  Thanks
  The Title is actually another name for the Devil. He has many names and many faces...
  
  Thanks for reading and commenting.
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
Dolphinettas
December 12, 2007
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Very visual
Wow what a poem I'm glad I don't believe in hell Very good
- Timespell
  December 13, 2007
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  Hell is place that was born in Mankind's mind...It is only Mankind that can make it reality... Scary but true.
  
  Thanks for ready and commenting.
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
hunted33
December 12, 2007

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I don't mean to be negative or put you down but I really do not like this poem. I don't believe in its message. Satan will burn in hell just like those who follow him. Hell is the punishment of those who do not heed God's word in their lifetimes.
- Timespell
  December 13, 2007
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  Yes...
  Don't worry that is exactly what I wanted from this piece...I don't want anyone to like such a Nasty vision and place. If you re-read the last stanza, you will see in line three onwards regarding God and why.!!
  Hope this helps.
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
Lady Dragonwyck
December 12, 2007
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WOW!! Very well done. A well told journey. Good luck in the contest.

Lady D
- Timespell
  December 12, 2007
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  Thanks
  Thanks for awarding this poem with the Silver Trophy...really appreciated it.
  
  Thanks again for reading and commenting.
  
  All the best,
  
  ~T.S~
- Timespell
  December 12, 2007
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  Thanks
  Thanks Lady D, I have been doing a lot of dark writes lately, and came up with this one for this contest... Even managed an Acrostic with it...LOL
  
  Thanks for reading and commenting on this dark one!
  
  All the best,
  
  T.S
lesbian-in-love
December 12, 2007

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That was wonderfully. Thanks so much for entering a very fine piece of work and good luck to you in the contest.