in the valley of the dream
where my being draws its breath
young blossoms sprout sunward
from a vast hidden eden
roots course through worn footprints
left in unyielding stone
turned to soil by the progeny
of a seed you once planted
In a list
A contest entry
- Contest for free verse poems ( prewrites allowed... without medals) by Manoj Sanyal.
370 points, ended April 23, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Say stuff.
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In the valley of a dream...of a seed you once planted
These are very powerful words!! I liked the poems message--Dreams like fotprints can last forever!!!! -
nice short poem.
Best wishes and good luck
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very good I loved your word choice good luck and thanks for the entry
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This Is Beautiful
I love nature and the imagery in your poem is beautiful as well as the message. Thank you for sharing your increadible gift to write poetry with me.
Blessings
Kelle Marie
stavykm
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excellent
Everything is a dream. Without dreams life would have no magic or beauty within.
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Thank you!
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All it takes is a seed, harvest is inevitable if planted in fertile ground, watered, given enough sunlight, and carefully nurtured.
Loved this!
I yearn for this place, although I have felt it inside many times.
Excellent! I wish you well in the challenge.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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I like it, very good.
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I really like the imagery you have captured within these words and the maybe sensual and romantic undertone with it
Thank you for entering the contest - I wish you the best of luck!
Leander -
Perhaps we should reconsider our beliefs. The scale of its projections is too constricted to do justice to the truth. Perhaps this is what we should perpetually be doing, in order to keep the hope alive that we may one time have some measure of understanding of the truth. Eden in my view is approaching the size of the universe. I thought my thoughts made me some type of a recluse. I guess I have to rescale once more. Thank you for creating and sharing and good luck in the contest. Take care,
Chris
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This is really beautiful, wonderful imagery with a touch of romance, so much in so little, very well done blessings always
adriana
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Simply Beautiful
What a gorgeous talented write! I love the simplicity and the depth. Love it!
Thanks for sharing.
Blessings and *stomps
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lovely
i was indeed of need of something simple and pure and sweet because my heart aches and even the flowers on this page brings forth comfort to my troubled mind - thank you -
Interesting....
Your poem captures me. It feels as if iam there and as if i made history or something. Its good, keep it up!
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Very nice indeed ...
are you returning to Iowa for Xmas?
ArtFullyMe seems to have managed to say everything I could have said about this, so I will just applaud it and move on like an .org.
Happy Holidays.
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I'm glad you resurrected it ..
Curious, how much imagery this captures for me.. everything from a literal backyard garden to more figurative ones.
The little touches like eden make it reach further, as do the footprints, and yet it could be yesterday..
Wonderfully timeless either way.
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