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No Trespassing

My truth is distorted,

and much smaller than yours.

Forty days and forty nights

I had to pound it with a hammer.

Now there's a universe in my head

that might come true some day soon,

misshapen just enough

to be crammed in too tightly.


You're a figment of my contentment,

I know how not to know you,

and I can think up your life

a lot worse than you're living it.

Wipe your feet on my blindness

before you get the hell out of here.

For crying out loud,

just look at this filth.


Please visit on occasion.

Please believe me when I lie.

Please bring a six-pack of sympathy.

Tell me you love what I despise.

And give me my due

when I say I'm fucking sorry.

I don't know how to mean it,

but I do have this hammer.

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  • ellipsist
    January 18
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    the following lines:

    "that might come true some day soon,

    misshapen just enough

    to be crammed in too tightly."

    blew me away...

    i also like the final two lines quite a bit... you have ended each stanza on a very strong note, with very powerful wording and image inspiring thoughts... i would say that these few short lines are the strength of this piece...

  • OhNoChastity
    January 16

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    God, have I been there. The anger and the love and the need in this poem is strong. I like the mix of emotions and that you didn't stray away from swearing. Good job.

  • Sorath
    December 22, 2007

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    Thank you for entering! This was awesome!! My favorite line would have to be Please bring a six-pack of sympathy. I thought that was really cool.
    Good Luck!