The Crack-whore market sign shone like a beaming ray of light guiding their way home on the dark lonely streets of Springfield.
It was the center of activity for a ten block radius that hosted the likes of prostitutes, the drug crazed, homeless, college students, artists, musicians, and criminals. There was always something going on that required the attention an overweight security guard that couldn’t seem to find employment anywhere else in the city and was reduced to accepting the position of guardian angel at this the center of the universe.
Tonight was no different than any other night of the year, except the weather, as Joe and Stella stopped in for a couple packs of smokes and some scratcher tickets. It was the beginning of December and the weather was threatening to bring on an ice storm with mist seeping down like a thick layer of cold sweat covering the forehead of a drug addict going through withdrawal.
As they walked into the crack-whore market they barely noticed the commotion toward the back corner of the isles where one of the regulars, a rode hard, put up wet prostitute named Faith was trying to talk the overweight security guard out of ten bucks for a cheap thrill. Bud, the security guard was seriously considering giving in to Faith’s temptations once again, but this would be the last time he thought. After all, he had a wife and kid at home the trusted him, and believed he was a God fearing man. Well, he did have Faith, at least twice a week.
Stella didn’t even notice Bud and Faith conducting their transaction, and Joe barely nodded at the pudgy guard in his worn out uniform as he paid for their smokes and stopped at the lottery machine to extract what would be their ticket to paradise.
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This is the beginning of a story I am working on so any feedback would be greatly appreciated!!!
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Sounds intesting, will wait till is finished
Nick
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this is good
i like your descriptive word choices
this is packed with shifting
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which i think makes for a great writei wish to read this from now untill your finish please keep me updated thanks
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very interesting !
the witty aspects of the whole piece did not go unnoticed....
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So far so good I'd like to read it when it's finished. I have one suggestion...you might re-think the phrase "a rode hard put up wet prostitute" though colorful it's a bit overdone by too many poeple. Think about it. Good read though -
I think this is a good beginning! I look forward to reading the finished product. Best wishes.
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keep up the story... id most love to read it when its done... too many stories these days are all lovey dovey... tis good to read stories that are more 'real'
hugs,
georgie,
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Wow... this was deep. Reminds me of an episode of Intervention. I think this is a great beginning, good luck with this story... although I think it should go on storywrite.com instead of allpoetry.
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