i wish that you actually cared about me, i wish that you and me could and WERE actually friends, i wish that you're birthday didn't fall on december 12th, and that you didn't lie to me when you said that your bithday was on december 26, because it isnt. i wish that you didn't live so far away, so far from me. i wish that you didn't say that you didn't love me, because i know you did, how could you deny so many things? i wish that you were someone i could actually lean on, but you're not and everybody knows that except for yourself. i wish that i wasnt so fucking sad, and nostalgic and why did i trust you? i wish that you had let us down violently...do you remember that time in my room when you used my words against me and said if you went down i would go with you? i would like to know where this falls into the picture.
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it sucks, but ti's a start and just part of a letter i wrote.
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december 24. half birthday. june 24.
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i dont get it?
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i don't either.
i think i was drunk...
weird.
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my first three poems were apostrophe poems, just like this one. love hurts, but it's worth it
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Wow;
This I can relate to. Truly. And you know it. You actually said this to a person? Well I certainly don't know the situation, but great for you to approach someone that made you feel "less than you are" or however you feel. I would do the same thing attacking "someone" but I know I could never be that honest to someone in words crafted like this;...well, maybe ONE person.....
Beautiful.
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i like your use of "polysyndeton" (i'm channeling bishop right now) and the questioning. the ending however, is nothing that you're capable of. i think you should try to write it again. otherwise this is fantastic.
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i would except for it was literally a myspace message'that i felt i should just post as a start, soyeah. thehn again, i have to write with "figurative language" for break, so whatever. i've just not been in writing mode for anything in a long time.
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