What is that precious essence
perfectly spilled
from wells of poetry’s endless offering
upon the page that thirsts
and filling every cup that needs?
It is memory of a thousand almost touches
wisped as softest, titled hand to cheek
and sweeping gust of bustling
that whips through tops
of heart's rustling branches
in metered song.
It is gentle wafting--
tingling flesh and kindling fire
to burn, not as ghastly flame,
but as laughter, untangling,
from within a smoldering pyre
of verse .
It is the bless-ed gale--
blowing sails of message
toward a distant, virgin shore
allowing lone and purposed vessel
to meet the fortressed heights of stone.
And as those swirling curls of inked existence
exhale as misty white
against the listless black of night’s chill hollow-
It is evidence
that the Breath of God
still whispers through the soul.
Author notes
Prompt and source of my title:
"Keepsake" by Everwind Rising
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3694476
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A contest entry
- Poetry Is... by Everwind Rising.
1800 points, ended December 22, 2007, 24 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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So I'm going through the AP and I thought, "Let me see what Ten's up too."-I found this gem I had missed-Perfectly scribed-I don't know what else to say about this except I truly think its one of the best I have ever read from you. Really a joy to read this...peace
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This is just amazing... I love the title just as much as I love the motion, the rythm and pure essential emotion from within pulled out of your fingers whispering gently in directions of my universe inspired by the inside of your mind.
This is what it's all about.
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I love this simplie speeks to you on a grounded leavel.
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This is really beautiful
I'm a really picky reader, but I am truelly happy to read this. Very beatiful words good flow without rhyming, and I love the metaphors you use very good
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"On Poetry", indeed, Scribe. I've also added this shimmering gem to my list of the same name, where it belongs. This is lovely and oh, so true. Well-deserving of the gold and of the spotlight. Brava! 
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Finally a poet of note who transcribes something felt and rarily seen. So soft and true. -c
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Oh my, the chills I recieved reading this. You are so talented i could hug you and smack you a kiss on the left or right cheek - in this case lets make it both cheeks.
Brilliant poetry. i curtsy and bow to thee.
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It is that essence of wind that carries the message of ten thousand cicadas to all of us here. Astounding with its ability to touch us all, whether forceful or gentle, we are affected. A beautiful poem, so aptly spotlighted.
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This is absolutly beautiful the last two couplets are amazing.
I wont soon forget this piece of poetry, truly inspiring.
thanks for sharing your talent for poetry.
Be blessed in all you do.
Tony
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Terrific and astounding!
This is one of those times when the soul has
been reminded..
Listen quiet learn.Now go live.
Just when you thought you had this comes along like a fierce but gentle wind and says no.
Brilliant write.
Love Peace
campanaro
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OMGoodness...
This is beautiful; so well done (an obvious Gold - congrats). Wow, I have to say that this is one heck of a way to scribe something...and so wonderful that you transcribed the wind, huh? Your word usage, imagery and brillance were/are on full display in this incredible piece. It is my favorite by you now (Bookmark time).
AsIThink...
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a masterpiece of wisdom, grace and bliss ...
I don't find better words to express what your verse evokes within me ...
it just says : "yes, yes, yes !"
your poems are a true blessing to all,
maa
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powerful
powerful word interesting write
i loved it
it was to good
amazingly done
nice choice of words in every sentence
thank you for sharing keep writing
your truelly an amazing writer keep them coming -
you deserved the gold
this is outstanding
your word choice is perfect
always
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Wow, I really love the line "It is memory of a thousand almost touches" and this poem overall... it has beautiful imagery and form, floating from one stanza to the next. Your punctuation is perfect.
I am just put into awe by this piece. It's a stunning piece of writing. Although I am not religious, I find that this is an absolutely beautiful poem.
-eveline.
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You have such talent in your voice, every word you choose placed in precision affects the thoughts of the reader. Mind blowing how you manage it, I am in awe of the beauty you produce. Keep penning! Congratulations on gold - deserved!
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Very thoughtful and provacative. It challenges the senses. Good write. Happy trails
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*long exhale* Well. I see you've managed to stay busy writing over the few months of my absence. Your pieces are still captivating as ever. I mean this piece- this- I. Love. This. I can't put it any simpler. I think every poet writes poems about poetry at some point in their career, but I doubt I've ever read one so creatively original and inspiring. It felt just like leaves blown on the wind, the way you wrote in semi-thought fragments. Yet it felt like more than just leaves on the wind. This thing drips with creative energy. And that last stanza! That's dynamite! You're an inspiration to us all TTC.
Keep it up! ~SI +==}=========*
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Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful.
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Outstanding bit of writing
truly enjoy the use of the wind and sea metaphors..I am rarely comfortable commenting on free-verse, but this piece is sweet.. Well-done. Larkin
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What first caught me was the title..Awesome title.
When I clicked and read your poem, it all just fits together. You wrote a wonderful description of life using fantastic metaphors. I truly enjoyed this.
Great job and congratulations on the Gold.
Soulful Woman
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A very telling description of how some if not all poets are inspired by nature and the Lord himself,Yet still within A sense of ambiguity for those not so inspired to make of as they will.
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last stanza sums your thoughts up well!
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lovely
The metaphors are unified by the movement of air, from the slightest touch to a heavy force - it is breath that indicates life, the "Breath of God" for human life. I like your images and phrases, the pure sound of "laughter, untangling" is sweet to me.
Congratulations on your trophy, well done!
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Delightful! I especially enjoyed "laughter, untangling, as from within a smoldering pyre of verse", and the outstanding "evidence that the Breath of God still whispers through the soul."
I particularly enjoyed the wind metaphors, after moving from the well/water analogy (Lines 2-5; does that idea tie back in at the "curls of inked existence"? If not, perhaps its omission might make the overall consistency run even stronger?). Especially as the 'wisp/gust/wafting/gale' tied so very well into the conclusion! Excellent write, very enjoyable!
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stunning! I know of more than a few that would definitely echo these sentiments! beautiful and masterfully composed! an excellent and eloquent poem!
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Superb. Beautifully written. Poignant.
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