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A sleepless night

I can only imagine

at 3am writing    alone

consuming caffeine   eyes wide open

visiting the junctions of life

 

love isn’t always true

it’s a complicated thing

something we all do

in the crack of a smile

hanging on an empty face

 

I hear the tick

of time bending slowly

  -bluesy kind of feel

painted pigments    whirl-winding

a windmill of thoughts

blinding

 

like a sterile white room

aches  - for well voices

scattered thoughts fall

through invisible breaths

 

*

*

 

sometimes

it rains inside my head

liquid voices soothing

a million miles from yesterday

 

burning holes on the edge of imagination

catching words

in sweet scents of vanilla

   -behind thin black veils

the sun spits morning

defining another tick of a clock

activating the will to survive

 

and I can only imagine

at 3am writing    alone

consuming caffeine   eyes wide open

visiting the junctions of life

that I might miss a speck

of meaning around a sharp bend

 

as time ticks

 

bending slowly

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Sesheta
    December 15, 2007

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    Wow. This definitely deserved the gold. It captivated, the words pratically reading themselves in that soft tone...I feel this poem as I read it, remembering...beautiful use of the subtle and the strong...your words speak for themselves...I especially love the repition of the last stanza, the very end, and the word choice.

  • luvdrkchocolate
    December 15, 2007

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    Wow. I can see why this one would win gold. It's really great. You have a wonderful way of weaving your words on this. Not to much metaphor but just enough to color it. I think that they second part of this after your dots was my favorite. It just kind of seemed like on that part you really kicked it up a notch, if you know what I mean. It was really great.


    • zochit2me gold member
      December 15, 2007
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      Thanks for that wonderful comment.
      Greatly appreciated and humbly accepted.


      Becky


  • Dalaney gold member
    December 15, 2007
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    one of your best...oh, thank you
    Love, Lane

  • vertigo beat
    December 13, 2007
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    can't tell you how many times i've felt this way.

  • Rowan gold member
    December 12, 2007

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    I love the repeating stanza, it really works with the time and second feel to this. Such a lonely, haunted feel to this 'timeless' piece.
    Excellent.


  • Layne
    December 11, 2007

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    WOW, this was flawless. You deserve the gold on this one. THe imagery is amazing, one of the best pieces I have read in quite some time.
    "it rains inside my head
    liquid voices soothing
    a million miles from yesterday"--wow very clever
    I love the creativity in this, it draws you in from beginning to end. Good luck
    -Layne

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