Looking at my photograph
you blew a kiss
that sailed on a breeze
from your lips
across your outreached palm
on its way to my heart
hundreds of miles away.
At that moment in time---
you loved me.
Author notes
"dance with the words"
A contest entry
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Good job. I thought that this was unique.
good luck and keep writing!!
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What a beautiful, short poem. Loved how you wrote it, to make one imagine they were there to witness this. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest. Take care and have a great day.
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This is such a sweet and loving piece. The emotions are strong and I like that. Love is truly awesome and you captured it well. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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This is sweet. It was amazing. Enjoyed reading this. thank you for entering ad best of lcuk too you in the contst!
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Awww this is so sweet.
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To Once Be Loved Is Better To Have Never Loved At All...
Awesome Expressionism Towards A Fallen Love..
Smooth Yet So Mournful...
But All In Good Taste.
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clearly a winner... i liked most of it...
a doubt: why did he/she love u only at that "one" point in time..?
the way the poem built up i felt the love was there since a long time and would continue to stay as well...
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A good love poem. Seems it's gotten accolades in contests as well.
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I had to read this as i have my favored poem entered into this contest of which poem has the same title. Different take though i love your poem, i found it quite refreshing. Much to behold in the bereavity of our thoughts.
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At that moment in time---
you loved me.
I like this ending.
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AMAZING JOB!
SO short and SO sweet
It just had me in "awe"
Thank you so much for entering
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this ... was ... breathtakingly beautiful -
a scenario that loads of us can think about but which YOU pieced together and looking at it, it's perfect!
i'm amazing this hasn't won any trophies!
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Where is the twist?
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The twist is the word loved (past tense). The poem is written as if they are still in love.
Hey, if it doesn't fit, feel free to remove it. Richard
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This piece is very sweet and meaningful. Your emotions come across well and it flows very nicley. I can feel the love in your words. Very nice job and good luck! -
i like this piece becuase it holds truth to you and me, for i too have been in this situation, but you did such an awesome job with this overall how you take a situation and show its hardship and your emotion.
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very well done.. swimming with emotion.
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Wow... i loved this.
You captured the beauty
of true love here and in
such lovely ways..
Gorgeous imagery & thoughts.
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Beautifully Done
I love it, it's very short, but it's right to the point. A very romantic poem. Nice! -
Wow...
So romantic and so very beautiful.
Nice though work.
Loved the feeling it gave me.
Short yet meaningful.
Thanks for sharing
Swati
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this is simply beautiful...your words captured the beauty of the moment/experience
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wow this one was sooo short but really said a whole lot. You used wonderful imagery describing how the kiss came to be and where it ended up. I really enjoyed it! And congrats on winning all the trophies with this one. It deserves it. Great job writing this.
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This is vey simple and I enjoyed it. The image of the wind carrying a kiss for what ever distance is very touching. The last line is powerful too. As I read the final line it made me want to look over the first part and remember the delicate emotions you've conveyed. Thanks for sharing.
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this was amazing i loved your emotion...sorry its taking so long to judge i have to go threw and read each persons poem...i'm going to announce the winner after i finish reading all of the poems....and i felt every word:] and good luck
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This poem is a bit short for my taste but that's fine, it still lived up to all the other poems about love out there. The idea of the blown kiss being the only thing connecting two lovers at the time, then one of them falling out of love even while the kiss still travels. Thank you for sharing your poem with me and for entering my contest, good luck! <3
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This is a short poem, yet gentle and fulfilling in its emotion. It has simplistic language, not using any fancy words that might detract from the pure feelings that originate from reading this poem.
The only criticism I have, is the use of the word "launched" in the second line. Compared to the rest of the poem, it seems overly powerful and forceful. You could possibly change the line to "you blew a kiss" or something similar.
I wish you the best of luck, and keep writing and improving your poetry. ^__^
Aeris Silverlight
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Thank You
You were right about the word "launched" I changed it to blew. Thanks
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Thanks for your entry. This is beautiful
Good luck in the contest!
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nice write...few words and imagery packed into a short poem and it is great. thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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That was beautiful. You say so much with so little bit you make it worth while. I was truly amazed by this poem, and didn't expect to like it as much as I do. But it was truly beautiful, had mesmerizing.
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I thank you, sweetvictory
and I am honored to be selected as one of your favorites. I will certainly check out your writings.
Richard
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This is succinct and I like the imagery.
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I like this a lot - short and sweet (:
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wow so much in so little words! very good poem! amazing! good luck in the contest.
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i really liked this poem. thank you for entering. i also really liked the beginning. good work.
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This is sweet. I really like the beginning. One of the better poems I've received so far. Thanks for entering, welcome to the finalists.
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Thank you Chaos Star
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can we say WOW! although it may be short, it sends alot of emotion pooring through. wich is always a good way to write. you also have a good way of making the words flow together in an incredible way!! great job!
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This is really well written.Puts me in the mind of my first kiss.Very well thought out and full of feeling.Good luck in all the contests you oughta win cause this is good.Like the title for this and the backround chose was good.
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aww this is so beautiful a wonderful write i love the flow of the peace its short and to the point yet says so much
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My first entry!
Firstly, you did a fantastic job with this piece.
As your reader I can feel your heartache
and as your judge I can see a brilliant poem!
"that sailed on a breeze
from your lips
across your outreached palm"
My favourite part^
Secondly thank you for entering, you are welcome to enter more if you please.
Sophie
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I thought this was short and very sweet. Long distance relationships can be difficult, and this was a sweet reminder that sometimes they really can work. I enjoyed this piece, and thought that it really brought out an emotion that was hidden far behind the short words of this piece. Great write.
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Love it
Oh so few words but such meaning, I got goosebumps reading this and although I have never been in a long distance relationship IUm right there with you on this one, its beautiful and you deserve to do exceptionally well in the contest best of luck. Take care and thank you for sharing this heart warming write. Take care Kathrin xx
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It's beautiful. I too am in a long distance relationship and I just found this poem to say everything. It's short and simple, yet says everything, not an easy feat so kudos.
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Beautiful Job!!! I think you did a great job!!! Very well written. Thanks for sharing, I enjoyed reading this!! Keep writing!!! I look forward to reading more from you!!!!
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wonderful set of lines. I myself am in a long distance relationship, so a part of this i feel. thanks for entering
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Awww.. this was very sweet and I think you've managed to illustrate how wonderful it is to be loved in the moment that you are being loved. Wonderful job with the contest prompts as well. I think you should have won. Oh well, keep writing and I'm sure you'll rack up those gold awards. Great job. I hope to read more from you in the future!
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It feels great to have another poet love my poem. Thank you for your very kind words
Richard
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A real stunner...Damn, I LOVE it...
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The simple beauty of this poem brings feelings of sadness, but smiles, too It's strong impressiveness has a warm, sensual feel to it.
Good luck in the contest, my friend
Dee
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Thank you Dee
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Wow. Very beautifully penned.
Sad and strong.
Fantastic write
Stay safe
~Manda
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