Train your eyes to see in the dark
There’s no light round here anymore
Teach yourself to lean on one less sense
The things you want to see will slowly fade
Arrange your heart not to see, so you won’t see me when I leave
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i just wrote this one, as in like three seconds ago, and it has nothing to do with anything right now, but i think i like it
Written October 30th, 2003
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Interesting yet somewhat unfocused--sounds as if the piece is striving towards becoming a Chinese proverb, but I am currently studying the Tao Te Ching, so I may be biased.
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good read
i like this poem/ i think the last line more tells a story going along as you dont want to hurt them by them seeing you walk away. or leaving them.. who knows, just what i got out of it. and the line right before it "The things you want to see will slowly fade", that makes it seem like the person would be hurt by seeing you leave,and they dont want to see you leave, therefore you wouldnt be fading if they closed their hearts eyes... hopefully that makes sense, either way. it was a good write. i like it alot.
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This is an amazing piece...I am utterly speechless....wow is all I can say.
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this is beautiful. " See no more, when I leave"... It touched me deeply! XOXO
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This is a nice write...enjoyed reading this very much...
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This was cute, has that nice circuity to it in that you end up exactly where you predicted you would, but that takes nothing away from this poem's effectiveness.
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perhaps, perhaps
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"arrange your heart not to see, so you won't see me when I leave" I like that line very much, it leaves me to wonder if perhaps you don't have something to hide? thank you, lissa
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