Pant Pant
Thump Thump
Pound Pound
All of the familiar sounds of running
Fill my ears
I love the excitment
The whoosh as I speed by
My feet pounding on the concrete.
The feeling of exhaustion
When I'm done
But I feel so free
And alive.
Author notes
I love to runnnnnn Yes I know it's short and sounds kind of rushed but what do you think?
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i liked it!! yayyy!! I love to run too but then I feel like passing out.
I like the onomatopaeias (please tell me I spelled that right!!)
lise
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Experiencial!!!!
I applaud the subject here.....most people write of inside feelings but here you have written about something you feel when you physically exert yourself. I can relate....however, I hate to run...maybe that's we my fortay isn't what I wished it would be....This is a great piece of work that describes a piece of life that many will never see. I enjoyed.
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