The cold, turbulent waves crash against the rocks,
Bombarding her with water like ice crystals.
It’s almost serene the way she twirls through the water,
Rushing and slowing in turns.
The solitude is just enough for her.
No screams of pain,
No words at all.
Lost in this dream-like state,
Her muscles relax as she drifts away.
Down, down, deep into the current.
Salt water burns her throat,
But she barely notices.
Her arms scratch and tear at the reef below.
A whorl wind of wetness twists her body,
Contorting it.
Entombed in this endless coffin,
Her soul is set free.
Eyes roll back,
And her skin prunes like a raisin.
No longer shivering,
The water’s almost warm.
Her dress disturbs the peaceful scene,
The blood out of place,
Looking almost pink.
It’s a genuine fantasy.
This was no brutal way to die,
Almost calm,
Serene.
Author notes
Option 2: Death. Words used: turbulent, bombard, reef, fantasy, whorl, crash, blood, disturb, entomb, serene, solitude, dream, genuine.
Enthralling Waters
A contest entry
- MYSTERIES OF THE SEA {5000 POINTS FOR GOLD} by liquidmindforever.
5300 points, ended December 24, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - WRITE! by xorandomxo.
800 points, ended December 16, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - for the poets who think they can write imagery (pw allowed) by abuyi.
1200 points, ended January 24, 2008, 29 entries
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Comments
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beautifully done.. its dark and lovely imagery.. how painful the death is but after everything is done and gone .. serenity
thanks for entering
best of luck
regards
abdulla -
this was a wonderful
take on the other contest using the words, and it is a nice write for imagery.
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Her dress disturbs the peaceful scene,
The blood out of place,
Looking almost pink.
It’s a genuine fantasy.
This was no brutal way to die,
Almost calm,
Serene.
I love these lines doll.
This poem was brilliant.
<3
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