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Pieces And Puzzles


What place has man in Nature's schemes?
A bridge that spans the black abyss
that yawns beneath our feet in dreams,
the while we pause and reminisce,
exploring all life's countless themes.

If brute we were, long ages past,
uncouth, degenerate ape-man;
yet to the end we'll come at last,
a rudimentary super-man --
with future bright and powers vast.

Envision how our world could be
if Intellect, like Cosmic-Mind,
emblazoned Life's periphery --
and Art and Science joined to find
the key that bares Infinity.

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  • Perception
    April 12, 2008

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    The flow to this one was amazing... The rhyming was perfect. I like how you did this one. The thought~ very well done.

    Thanks for entering


  • Ellis gold member
    January 4, 2008
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    A wonderful philosophy! A beautiful poem.


  • Watuwant silver member
    December 18, 2007

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    This is a well crafted poem, Jim, and one that reminded me of me, and some of my writes.
    It is brimming with hope, while sharing the angst which accompanies this world of ours today. Nicely done, and again, very well crafted and said.
    peace
    doug


  • RatherImaginative silver member
    December 14, 2007

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    Consistant meter and effortless rhyme are just so pleasing to my eye . . . thank you. It is a common question: what is our purpose, our place? How do we fit, how can we fit to make world brighter in some small way? Your piece inspires contemplation of the best kind for me. I have a question about the 4th line of the first stanza, though: "the while". Is it a typo, or am I missing something?

    • ecrivain01
      December 14, 2007
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      Thanks ...

      for the kind words.

      As far as line 4, you are probably familiar with the phrase as "all the while", but the all is understood so there's no reason to include it and it would wreck the meter in the line.


  • Nikkisixxx
    December 13, 2007

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    That was incredible! It was short enough to hold my attention the whole way through and it was perfectly penned. Thanks!


  • mwilson50
    December 13, 2007
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    Very pretty

    Seems to cover it all. Makes the mind soar without a doubt.


  • capricornpoet
    December 11, 2007

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    Of art and science

    I love the originality of that third stanza as a final
    frontier...how art and science sometimes find paradox.
    "The key that bares infinity" deep and philosophical..
    Modern and sublime...


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    December 11, 2007

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    Oh ahven't we jsut tried everything...and in the end, a blink and it is over and we becomewhat we really are and needed to find a way to be in bone and flesh..spirit. Well done, thoughtful, and I liek poems that make me think deeply.


  • suseann
    December 11, 2007

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    That last hopefilled verse is golden! Yet at times,I envision mankind in the grand scheme of things. The lesser the longer he strives. I'm aware it's the nature of the beast/humankind/, to reach onward.Yet in doing so.We lose a delicate important part of the soul nature intended.You've beautifully descried our reach must excede our grasp,or what's a heaven for.Well in this.

    • ecrivain01
      December 11, 2007
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      Only time will tell ...

      but you're right. Robert Browning spoke the truth.

      Thanks again.

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