What did I do babe?
Why are you so angry at me?
All I did was hold your hand, and get you flowers.
Please baby, stop hitting me!
I stand outside and shake my head.
Wiping the blood away from my mouth, I look back.
Why was she so angry with me? I just don't get it.
Driving home, I slam my door tight, my own anger seething.
How could that bitch do that to me?
When did I do anything wrong?
Fuck it!
I'm so sick of this.
I'm tired of being treated like shit.
When all I ever did was love her.
Farewell to love, and all it's cruelties.
For I have seen the demonic red behind her eyes.
Demonic red that lured me in
Lured and trapped me like a fish
And like a salmon I lay helpless with you babe
I never knew you were like this
Never knew you were this evil
Never knew you were capable of hurting me this badly
Now as my heart bleeds
And my soul's crying out
You turn away and laugh
Each syllable torturing me like a knife
Each knife slashing at my soul
At my confidence
At my will to live
I pick up the phone
I just can't do this
The phone drops to the floor
I sit on my bed, shaking with anger
Bile is rising in my throat
Anger is coursing through my veins
I want to hurt you so badly
I want to kill you
You fucking bitch
How can you sit there and think it's just a game?
When I gave everything I had to you?
Author notes
Joint effort between me and Her American Nerd
We split the poem 50/50...can we split the points 50/50 please?
We went for option 2: Seeing Red
A contest entry
- Angry Poems. Fuck You poetry straight from the heart. by Fibe Kill-DFW Punk-.
650 points, ended March 12, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think?
Comments
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I know EXACTLY how you feel in this piece. I'm the one thats gunna walk away today, but he's the one that's ruined me. He's the one thats tortured my soul....... I'm so sick of being strong for someone else. I need someone to be strong for me while I break....
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Daughter of night
wow this poem is extreme and full of hate. all i can say i swhat a bitch lol -
This poem went a little further than I thought it would. It was interesting. It reminded me of a few poems I wrote, but not to this extreme:
1. Heartless
2. The Masquerador
3. Beautiful Garden Facade
Thanks for sharing.
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very angsty... more angst than raw anger... I was looking for something raw i should prolly hurry and add that to the contest description... Besides that this was good, I could feel the anger you felt towards her.
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Beautiful
I love this poem so much. You put so much emotion into this and it seems like you've been hurt badly. I love this so much that I can't stop talking about it. Keep writing. One day you could be famous for your poetry. -
what did you do?!!!
waw!! i like it much man!
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this brought tears to my eyes I just can't seem to see why females have t obe so cruel I guess it might be because she is tired of getting hurt so she was hurting you and pushing you away before you could get any closer to her
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aww i like it... it talks about killing people!!! XDDD and there is lots of cuss words!!! XD
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Unexplained hurt from a lover happens all the time, yet each time it is worse than before and each time its a suprose yet again. I like it! well done
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I really like the emotion in this poem, yu can really feel the anger and hurt. I don\t like the word babe in the first sentence but thats just because i dont like that word. very well described. and a great piece of emotion.
Great stuff.
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Great poem, I really loved the intensity you brought with every word. As I was reading, I couldn't help but feel angry too; Amazing way with words! Tis sad when Love hurts you like that though.
Crazy-Love♥ -
wow such an intense piece you have here. keep it flowing. best of luck to you.
andi
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Wow
This was very strong of words it was really good. Sometimes you just have to watch yourself and love yourself for awhile before you can show her what you really feel. Trust me I know well I hoped everything is all right with all and everything.
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very emotional. i loved the painful sharpness of this. pitty about the *bunny* tho. it spoilt it slightly. but overall really good!
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wow very strongly man but i love it
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wow, it's a very unique write, very graphic and violent, yet it still shows emotion.
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wow... loved it
this is amazing
awesome write
xxxx
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wow...this is very emotional and intense, but a great poem, keep writting and take care
Stephanie ♥ -
a v intense piece... ive been in this situation... and unfortunately caused this. i hope you can forgive her eventually... am sure she never meant to cause this pain.
tc hon,
hugs,
georgie,
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Well this is not bad. Shame that people have to go through this amount of pain to find true love. Best of luck in your search, I am sure she is out there
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Something along these lines is what I think we should go for... I know I've already commented, but I've seen a lot of poems in my years on AP But yes, something like this, methinks. Bravo again!
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wow, i thought this was supah good.... i like the angry emotions you put into the poem... and your imagery like "For I have seen the demonic red behind her eyes" and "Each syllable torturing me like a knife
each knife slashing at my soul at my confidence at my will to live". wow, this was so amazingly good. i like your "fuck it" attitude. overall, it was a wonderful poem!
-Adria
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WOW
This one had alot of anger.
What where you thinking?
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Makes me smile is all I can say.
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Wow, this is great, it made me angry to read it because the emotion seeped right out of it! I saw a lot of anger and hatred-mixed-with-love. It was really great, and even more so that you worked with someone on it! You should edit it and list the helper in the "Collaborate" Box. That would be a little more helpful for the reader.
All in all, you did a very great job!
Sorry.
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o.o
Wow.
Wow.
Wow.
-blinks-
Dude... This is freakin awesome. Best I've read in a long ass time. Such anger such pain....
DAMN!
Didn't know you had it in you!
I knew Dani did, though.
...Wow....
GREAT job you two.
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great
brilliant write, very powerfull. i can feel your emotion through this x peace -
Powerful stuff. Nicely done.
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Nice emotion... a little too much if you ask me. I told you a was gonna challenge you and so I will! I shall message you though or better yet, message me and I'll tell you what to do! lol! hugs and kisses Scott!
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aw...wow this was amazing
i really like this its really great
*hugs*
it sucks if you feel like this
love ya!
♥ Lena
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WOW YOU GUYS ROCK!!!!!!!!!! this was a good write
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Well... I was skeptical towards the beginning... I am not a fan of the word babe. But as I read on and got the very strong sense that you were in a killing mood ... the atmosphere changed and I ended up liking this a lot more than I thought I would. Not bad. Good luck in the contest.
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WOW, THIS IS FAN-FUCKING-TASTIC! This contest is going to be VERRRRRRRRRY hard to judge! Well done!
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