Dancing before naked eye
Particles whorl in blue
Entombed by vast sky
Sun warms crisp morning dew
Awakening all senses
As I sit in solitude
Behind man made fences
Falling, buried in sand
Structured from pretenses
Pyramidal energy stands
Mind arouses sea
And sea mist lands
Heavy swells move freely
Starfish clutch
But what exists is me
Everything I see and touch
Such serenity I love so much
Subject to dreams, miracles
and truths pyramidal
Author notes
Option 11 Solipsism {words} whorl,crash,entomb, pyramidal, solitude, dream, miracles & starfish. Pyramidal intelligence relates to this system of things like society and education which is all relative to our experience of life. In a way none of it may be true. All that is true is our own existence, not what we see, touch and feel (all of that is generated). That is why it is called solipsistic existence.
A contest entry
- MYSTERIES OF THE SEA {5000 POINTS FOR GOLD} by liquidmindforever.
5300 points, ended December 24, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Fantastic!
Wow this is deep and very thought provoking and I love the title too, and the poetic graphics and vivid imagery and what a superbly crafted ambiance, you have penned perfection here, well done, love it, write on!
Poetic Hugs,
Kaz.
Kazytc xx
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Wow, this is amazing Angelina!
The flow is flawless and the language is nothing short of brilliant.
<3 Jojo -
this is beautifully written from the word bank and uses strong captivating phrases well done and best of luck
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terrific use of a diffficult word bank and very nocy dpne,
Evan
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The sea holds many mysteries as does the pyramid of life. This was very deep and I think Des Cartes would love to have a conversation with you about it. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing it with me. The sea is my home. Keep writing poet. seamaiden ♥
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Wow great use of the word bank! Lovely imagery and flow! Thank you for sharing your gift!!
Lauren
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You did a very good job on using the word bank and everything came together nicely. thank you for sharing you talent with us all and best of luck in your contest dear !!
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Quite a piece of work!!!
Descriptive of the title...
Like coffee in a cup.
Lo-Amo
Salue!!
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FANTASTIC
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Love your wording, I think its really beautiful\
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Wonderful work here and thanks a lot
for sharing it with us all! Keep it
up and all the best to you with it in
this contest!
Jeremy0826 -
Great use of the word back this is a very nice Poem I wish you the best of luck in the contest keep up the great penning
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this is great. I wish you the best poet.
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A tough option you chose there... But you did wonderfully writing about it! I like this poem a lot, really, especially the wording. I like the relation to existence, our own existence. It's a thought provoking concept, this poem, and it made me think about a lot of things, which is a very good thing when it comes to my opinions.
Wonderful work with this one and good luck in the contest!
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amazing!!! truly
best of luck in this contest hun!
Tasha
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Well, I had to read it a couple of times to take it all in. And I still dont get it. I might just be o yuong to get it. But still a nice poem. good luck in the contest.
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Very well done with this challenge. This looks like a hard one but you did good with it. I wish you the best of luck in the contest
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WOW now that was a heck of an option, and you did a fantastic poem with that prompt! I love it completely! best to you in the contest~ blessings always~
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