The eye glistens in it's socket
rolls in fear and widens
with terror a tear trickles
down a punctured cheek.
The nose wrinkles at the scent
of voided bowels the hint of
lasagna sickening, nostrils
flare at each inhalation.
The heart races pushing life
faster through the gaps
skin now contains, each beat
shoving as life seeks escape.
Vomit burns in the back of
a throat raw from violent screams
what delightful lubrication
for fantasies later fulfilled.
Wrists cruelly cut by hemp rope
twisted from uncontroled struggles,
tighter they bite adding another
venue for life to flee.
Ears hear the sound of teeth parting
cloth rasping a buckle hitting
concrete, rough hands turn the body
gently, delicately, spittle plops.
The eye glistens in it's socket
rolls in fear widens in terror
and so begins the precise art
of skullfucking.
Author notes
Another piece from the depths.
A contest entry
- Show me darkest part of your soul (My favourites only) by shadow-of-the-sun.
570 points, ended February 21, 2008, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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lol well this is definately dark and disturbing. skull fucking is an interesting concept, i dunno if i would be able to do something like that, which is saying something coz i would try anything and everything lol. any way, nice work and good luck
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WOW....
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Wow... This is... descriptive! Where did THIS come from? Nice imagery though. From the mind of artists... LOL
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Thank you very much for your wonderful entry. Very well penned indeed. Best of luck in my contest and a very Happy New Year!
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Mind-shattering!
WOW! My own eye is pulsing in the sick beat of this poem. An overwhelming symphony that wraps its clawed hands around all my senses. I can't stop reading, I can't take my hand off the mouse, scrolling up and down the stanzas, lingering on each verse, feeling the pressure, the pain scraping my skin. Immensely artistic, deep and intesne. It feels good to read this on my return to AP, and from you, my dear friend. The title mentions graphic adult content, but this is far too tasteful and mentally penetrating in my opinion. Excellent evolution, truly inspiring, poetically and visually. Aplause is a weak praise for this gem.
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awesome
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Very suspenseful way you contructed the stanzas, they begin strong and end strong and lingering, opening up to the next piece, all the way to the very conclusive end. Your phrasing amazed me, as well, in and of itself...the little things...the subtle details...word choices! Demonically divine.
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whoa this is good, no it's EXCELLENT good luck in the contest!!!
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Wow what a dark and vile write this is. Your imagery is fantastic and the descriptions bring you deeply into the scene. Thanks for sharing it and good luck in the contest.
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Twisted
Skull fucking. Oh my gosh!!!! This was sick. hehe. Great job though. I did indeed like it.
Guin
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HOLY FUCK.........DAMMIT, I THINK YOU HAVE ME BEAT!
GARRRR......YOU'RE SO DAMN GOOD!
THis is truly sickening and vile,
you just might be my inspiration!
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Damn !!! This is gruseomly madd!!!
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Hmmm.
Admittedly... This is not the type of poetry I find myself indulging in on a regular basis, but.. Despite the content itself.. The poem actually shows a great mastery of poetic device. Well done. Your imagery is flawless, however disturbing it may be, and I very much enjoyed that you took it into a form of sorts. I believe you've accomplished the goal of this contest. Good luck in the judging.
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WOW! This poem was very deep and the imagery was amazing, but I'm not going to hold back this here did frighten me a little, but it is still an amazing poem. You did an excellent job with this. Best wishes to you in the contest and I hope you have an amazing and wonderful Christmas this year.
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Rarely do I visit the darkside
of my mind. It's better I think sometimes not to know all your own secrets. On occassion pieces like these flow free and are shoved out to live or die on a page. Thank you for reading I know it's not exactly your cup of tea.
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