a sweet garden gem
her petals soft and tender
top a thorny stem
In a list
A contest entry
- Allpoetry: If you know MargaretG please enter. by Lyndon.
1780 points, ended December 17, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I like your Haiku
Nice Aha moment!
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Thank you.
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A beautiful Haiku.
[Margarita Rose is the best known given names of a granddaughter of the Late Princess Margaret, sister to the Queen. I know not of a rose named for her!]
Metaphors are unusualin short Japanese forms. "Garden Gem" must be a metaphor. "Her" brings in the complication of gender unless the haiku extends to an elaborate personification of Margaret. And, I do think you meant this to be so.
So, a delightful poem; at first flush, a beautiful Haku.
Lyndon ofthe Winklings. -
I am not a great enthusiast of the haiku/senryu form... but can appreciate that this is good of its kind. A purist might object to the rhyme... - and the fact that the sense break after the 12th syllable is rather weak.. but why should you not experiment with the form if you choose? (It is only when someone specifically states that a poem is in such-and-such set form - and then fails to follow the rules of that form that I get a little vexed!)
I am wondering if there is a rose called "Margarita", or "Margarita Rose"? The combination reminds me of the late Princess - who was always referred to as "Margaret-Rose" in childhood, though she dropped the "Rose" as soon as she was old enough to make her feelings about it known. -
Short & Sweet
and offers us all something to think about while we flower. Nice dedication to her! joy
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Thank you and may you ever blossom!
Rahad
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Thank you for this sweet haiku, Rahad. I wanted to be the only rose in the world with no thorns, but I have them like everyone else. I will cultivate your attitude, where the postitive comes first.
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Always welcome
Know that 50 is just a number and holds no magic to describe the eternal bud you are, here in the EverNow. This heart will always be warmed by the perfect flowers you share here and the deep understanding of you comments.
Bloom as peace,
Rahad
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What a beautiful combination of words that picture the reality of a human.
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And taken all together they are meant to picture the true beauty of a lovely human. Thank you dear Star Shine and may you shine ever brightly.
Rahad
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