So long ago, in a perfect garden paradise,
we wanted to govern ourselves,
to be in control of our own lives,
to be free from law.
We were given a mile, we took an inch,
and therefore, fell from grace.
"Give me liberty, or give me death!" I cried
as I shook my fist with rage.
Freedoms of speech! religion! and press!
such laws we did not want.
Resenting the taxes, the rules and the king,
we four sealed our own dark, looming fate.
"Liberty!" we cry, as we mourn the grave
of our children fallen in war.
"Freedom!" as bodies once private are devoured,
a feast for lustful eyes.
"Choice!" as babies are murdered
before they can even breathe,
and families are torn over drugs and drink,
because "it's my body, not yours."
If "this is what is best for us,"
if power is what we crave,
if "submission" is an uglier word than
the ones five-year-olds hear from
their beloved parents mouths,
then by all means...
Let Freedom Ring!
Author notes
This is meant to inspire you, to move you to feel, think, act. In your comments, please tell me how you feel. Feel free to critique it poetry-wise as well. Thank you.
A contest entry
- Speak out! by Luna Argintie.
930 points, ended September 9, 2008, 205 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What does this make you feel?
Comments
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Definitely inspiring. I really love the last line of this, 3 words, but very powerful! Best of luck to you in the contest. x
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I like your sarcasm, especially in the last stanza!Sarcasm makes it easier to sink in the message in the reader.
Good job and thank you very much for entering the contest!
Liana -
Very good
Instead of directing the reader with your words to your point of view you use wonderful imagery to make us see the truth behind the words. The emotion and imagery are perfect. The words say everything by evoking thoughts within the reader's consciousness of familiarity because it is so easy to relate to the message of your poem. I felt the words as well as read them and they are powerful, Great Job!
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