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Always

I'll always take you as you are,

That means now,

Or now,

Or now,

...Or now.

 

 I'll never leave you behind,

That means...

I won't,

I can't,

I shan't.

 

The "always" and "nevers" don't matter,

They're either past or future tense.

I don't know, maybe they're present tense.

The point is, they're too tense,

Just relax and feel the moment.

 

Were you here,

I'd kiss you.

Were you here,

I'd snuggle you.

If you were here, I'd have my wish.

 

That wish of;

You and me,

Sense and emotion,

kisses and snuggles,

Past, present, and future.

 

Can

Only

Begin

 Right

Now.

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  • Patpowers silver member
    January 13, 2008

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    Thanks Steve!

    Nice work on this romantic piece! Enjoyable to read a work like the one you put on here! THANKS!

  • LuckyRainbow
    December 24, 2007
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    that was a great write i need that it was so full of emotion and compassion


  • raggyann
    December 16, 2007
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    this was swet and full of emotion
    well done i loved your ending


  • sidewinder silver member
    December 16, 2007

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    love and romance finds it's whisper within that dream at hand where memories are kept and held!
    Yes you have me smiling because of my own past memories!
    Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
    Bill


  • Taodesteve
    December 15, 2007

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    Good

    I've felt thought that same way myself, there's too much talk about the past and the future, there must be talk about the here and now!

    As for a part that I didn't like, using the word shan't sorta made me look twice and broke the flow of the poem.

    Other than that though, it's good stuff!


  • Alittle2lost
    December 13, 2007

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    i love it. it's innocent and sweet. one of the lighter things i've seen from you. it's Really nice. It makes me smile... and want to snuggle. It's really well done, and it's got heart. i like it.

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