Wondrous star that lit the sky,
bathed the humble in fear of sight;
guiding men to journey’s crib
with message of everlasting Light.
Wondrous star now synthetic fad -
symbol of arrogance and of greed;
forgotten the purpose of its gist,
as the message has lost its worth.
Wondrous star, you have burned within my heart
yearning’s love for all under Christmas sky.
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A contest entry
- PIF PICTURE PROMPT by penman.
525 points, ended December 11, 2007, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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bit of a dark look at the christmas thing, I am definately there with that. all the ads and all the frickin' runnin' around and drinkin' and eatin' and not once did I here god bless or something .
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Ah Frans ...
forever the need to find the Core, the Essence ... And, as Micol pointed out: the wondrous star never changes ...
Thank you for your ever-reminding words, always.
Love
Myra
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I do like the first and last stanzas particularly, since they concentrate on 'love's yearning' so well. The italics work nicely to counterpoint the image/poem, even in the second stanza...regardless of what happens out there, the 'wondrous star' never changes.
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Some unusal and creative words in here that you pulled off very well. Congrats.
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Excellent
Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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This poem again reminds me why I don't really like Christmas time - especially when you live in a town like Mossel Bay and thousands flocking here... it's the "synthetic fad" of it... But despite that you give us the star's true meaning, the guiding light "guiding men to journey's crib". A wondrous star indeed and it shines in this poem.
~ Nicolette
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Nicolette
I know the feeling - thank you for your comments. Frans
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