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Poetry: a Right Brain Function

 

  I’m drawn, by hypnotizing pirouettes
  to bygone days of water, wind and wood.
  When lone, in calm and gusty airs, I stood
  and gybed to test our Mother Nature’s face,
  by changing tacks with downwind starboard grace.
  A flock of laughing seagulls understood
  how thrills of  youth and ways of motherhood,
  ignite a dance of life without regrets.

  But then, some neurons whispered, “discipline”
  within my synapses and endocrine.
  I left my boyish sailing days behind
  for goals tobacco with caffeine defined.
  Life’s optical illusions disappeared.

  She’s spinning left. She’s naked. She’s just weird!

 

Author notes

Left Brain Functions:  uses logic, detail oriented, facts rule, words and language, present and past, math and science, can comprehend, knowing, acknowledges, order/pattern perception, knows object name, reality based, forms strategies, practical, safe.

Right Brain Functions:  uses feeling, "big picture" oriented, imagination rules, symbols and images, present and future, philosophy & religion, can "get it" (i.e. meaning), believes, appreciates, spatial perception, knows object function, fantasy based, presents possibilities, impetuous, risk taking

Gybe:   A jibe or gybe is when a sailboat turns its stern through the wind, such that the direction of the wind changes from one side of the boat to the other. Gybing a small craft in gusty or strong winds involves careful control of the sails to prevent capsizing.

Form: Italian Sonnet Derivative

Note:  A more complete test, showing your percentage Right and Left is at:  http://www.wherecreativitygoestoschool.com/vancouver/left_right/rb_test.htm 

A contest entry

The Right Brain vs Left Brain test ... do you see the dancer turning clockwise or anti-clockwise? If clockwise, then you use more of the right side of the brain and vice versa. What do you see?

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  • Umi Juvariel
    April 9

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    Interesting picture and poem here. The title really brought me in. I like how you explained the meaning and gave some insight in your author notes, very nice thing to do. Great alliteration too. Excellent write and good luck in my contest.


  • Rheea gold member
    July 18, 2008
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    wow i took the test too this is so lovely and helpful.


  • Sagerider
    July 17, 2008
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    Beautiful

    I enjoyed it from start to finish. interesting picture. Initially I saw her turning counter clockwise but after blinking then I saw her turning clockwise. I must have had a brain flip-flop.


  • rhondasail
    January 18, 2008

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    Hmmm...what if I can see both clockwise and counter clockwise...?...and luffing sails are a danger...I know from experience of floating in the bay after being knocked off by the ...oh well this is not about me, it is about your writing...ahem...lol...First there's a typo...'weird', last line...I enjoyed the 'pirouette' of the words, they cast a sense of circling movement for anyone with an eye to the sea and even for those who like to dance...but I felt a bit saddened to think it all ends with a smoke and a cuppa...lol...kind of a dime store novel ending of such a wonderful ride......Loved the write, really...and what drew me was the category of Neurology?...never woulda thought of it...Peace, Rhonda

  • megcat
    January 8, 2008

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    Sultan enjoyed this very much and took the text - 63% Left 37% Right ....I couldn't even see her going to the right at all!


  • maa gold member
    January 2, 2008

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    wow, my husband saw the dancer turning to the left ! ... so I made him take the test, and indeed, it says that he's 59 % left-brained ...

    the funny thing is that he's a psychiatrist, so he loves this kind of stuff ... and I do, too !
    thanx again ...

  • maa gold member
    January 1, 2008
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    now this was an amazing gift for me in every manner ... firstly, i looooooove sonnets, especially with good meter ... and your meter is purrrrrrrrfittttttt (only one suggestion in line which has an extra unstressed syllable : maybe you could say "a group of laughing seagulls understood" instead of "a party of ...") besides that, your vocabulary and imagery is exceptional, and the message just stunning ...

    of course I had to do the test, and it says that maa is heavy on her right brain (64 % right brain - 36 % left brain) ... what's your percentage ?

    by the way, the dancer spins clockwise, how could it spin otherwise ???

    wishing you a very happy and humorous new year 1008 - oooooops, I guess this was my right brain ....

    maa


  • Ellis gold member
    December 28, 2007
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    First turning one way; then the other

    Very interesting -- educational.
    -----


  • RatherImaginative silver member
    December 28, 2007

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    Hehehehe that dancer is tricky. I watched her for a moment turning to the right, and then began scanning your poem again. My eyes were drawn back to her when she began spinning to left. Then I realized that I myself could determine what direction she spun. What does that say about me, I wonder? The poem itself was fascinating, an interesting and amusing blend of visual scene and thought. I was brought back to many of my college psych classes. Thanks so much for entering my contest!


  • transit
    December 27, 2007

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    funny and interesting poem but I need to know why sometimes it seems she is moving clockwise and at others, anti-clockwise?

  • LittlePauper
    December 19, 2007

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    :]

    Interesting poem. Me likessss
    How is the dancer -not- turning clockwise? Oh well, I'll never know, I guess.

    Your Left Brain Percentages
    34% Logical (Your most dominant characteristic)
    27% Verbal
    27% Reality-based
    22% Linear
    22% Sequential
    17% Symbolic (Your least dominant characteristic)

    Your Right Brain Percentages
    50% Nonverbal (Your most dominant characteristic)
    48% Holistic
    46% Concrete
    44% Fantasy-oriented
    34% Intuitive
    28% Random (Your least dominant characteristic)
    I guess you learn something new every day?


  • FindinSoundInSilence
    December 19, 2007
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    interesting. Ur poem flowed nicely. i like the way u wrote it.


  • Angel w o Wings
    December 16, 2007

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    Your Left Brain Percentages

    54% Reality-based (Your most dominant characteristic)
    37% Linear
    30% Logical
    27% Verbal
    9% Symbolic
    0% Sequential (Your least dominant characteristic)


    Your Right Brain Percentages

    50% Random (Your most dominant characteristic)
    36% Fantasy-oriented
    32% Nonverbal
    30% Holistic
    29% Intuitive
    28% Concrete (Your least dominant characteristic)



    This is what I found out about my brain chemistry, which I am told, is very rare. Thank you for sharing this with us all. Your poem was really good, by the way.

  • kirkman
    December 15, 2007

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    verrry good

    It flows much better at the beginnig, but the whole piece is really great, interesting, and captures one's attention. I guess I use the right side of whatever brain I have.


  • SweetLeaf
    December 15, 2007

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    I think the dancer thing is an optical illusion. First she was turing clockwise then she somehow turned to counterclockwise. Weird, but very interesting....


  • imperfectperfection
    December 13, 2007

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    Very Interesting

    hhhmmmm I'm right brain *thinking* .... wow you've really nailed this left vs right... the poem is extremely interesting and very thought provoking... I believe we are all left & right brained, just what is more dominant... like in your poem first paragraph beautifully captures the right brain & second para took on brilliantly your left brain - one of the most interesting piece I've read... thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest... take care Minoo

  • Papagallo
    December 13, 2007
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    9

    Interesting work. well i am a right brain person. do others see the dancer differently


  • A Soul Torn Asunder
    December 13, 2007

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    Fascinating

    I love how you tied the imagery in with your theme. The first stanza is right brained, the second, left. Highly gratifying, and very much appreciated. I enjoyed every part of this piece very much. The author's note was interesting as well; it's fascinating how the two can co-exist while seeing things two starkly different ways.
    The poem was touching, a dedication to all the innocence and imagination lost in the time pockets of adulthood and practicality; it truly makes me long for my younger days.
    And perhaps the most interesting thing about your gif., is that if you see it as I saw it, she sways back and forth.
    Well done, keep up the wonderful work!


  • rauffray
    December 13, 2007
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    Great!

    I love it. It's what poetry ought to be; at least in my humble estimation.

  • riley501111
    December 13, 2007

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    Interesting

    On first glance she was spinning clockwise. Then I stared and tried very hard to see her spin counterclockwise with no success.  Now here's the interesting part. I then read the descriptions of right brain function and left brain functions, looked at her again, and she was spinning counterclockwise. Then I looked over at the pattern on the right of the page, looked back at her, and she was spinning clockwise again.
    Wonderful poem.  


  • storiesuntold gold member
    December 13, 2007
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    Great piece here

    Yes within your muse I see a clockwise pattern


  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    December 13, 2007

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    Ha ha! I also saw both ways... It starts off clockwise, and changes halfway through... Perhaps I, like Montez, don't have a brain... Definitely a great write, the end cracked me up! Well done

  • montez gold member
    December 13, 2007

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    Bloody 'ell....

    .....I see her turning both ways.
    Perhaps I don't have a brain.
    Interesting concept, and beautiful rhyme and rhythm
    Well worth the clap!
    Robin.


  • Poetdontknowit
    December 13, 2007

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    NEAT

    Awesome penning you have "thought" up here! This is great knowledge! I had a head injury on the left temporal in 1996, so how welllllll do I known about such things. I looked at the picture several times, and she dances both ways for me. I had a lot of fun at 5 in the am here doing this. I loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    POETDONTKNOWIT AND TORI


  • Lily of the Valley
    December 12, 2007

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    lol, the humour in your poem made me laugh and the picture is quite mesmerising. I find this all quite fascinating and wonder just how much fact is mixed with fiction on the internet about left and right brain functions.

    If I look at the picture the woman turns clockwise but I can make her change direction at will by looking elsewhere on the page. If spinning clockwise means right brain dominance then I would disagree to a certain point as I have always considered myself as more left brain dominant. I am logical, deal with facts far better than philosophy, always been good at maths and science, words and language make up a large precentage of my work, plus many of the other left brain attributes feature strongly in my life.

    While I also have some, if not all of the right brain functions too, they are not so dominant. Perhaps this is just a perception of myself and others may view me differently but what ever the case I think the left and right brain work in harmony to create the 'whole' and one can not function fully without the other to allow a healthy balance.

    I really like your poem and the challenge it sets to each individual as it makes us think about who we are, how we function, and even what is real and what is not. Perhaps life is one huge optical illusion?


  • ArieLLeGiSeLLe
    December 12, 2007

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    this was a cool thing to read. at first i saw the woman spinning counterclockwise, but as i focused, she turned clockwise. how is that posssible that you can percieve it two tdifferent ways? it was cool; a bit idealistic in the anthropomorphic form.


  • Poesing
    December 12, 2007

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    Truthfully, dude, I really like your poem, but the dancer is extremely distracting! She's twirling clockwise for me!

  • Eusebius
    December 12, 2007

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    bravo

    exellent and so well done in every respect...I liked this wonderful and whimisical piece a great deal!! bravo... bravo... bravo...


  • starwing
    December 12, 2007

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    now this was different...nice take on the....as a child i played like a child and when i grew up put away childish things... verse...so often we forget(regret?)not seeing through that child's eyes... peace and harmony.... desi


  • SimpleSarcasm
    December 12, 2007

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    I enjoyed this piece. It flowed well and didn't stumble over the end rhymes. I usually don't like rhymes in poems but I did enjoy this piece. I also liked your word choice, fits the theme -- perfectly.

  • fairyzion
    December 12, 2007

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    Well-crafted choreography.

    Being a dancer, in theory, she should be rotating to the left, but as a dancer you hopefully play many parts and I used to teach without a mirror. Ever try walking intentionally with the weaker intended foot. Pretty difficult to do without thinking about it. I can see you are a bit ambidexterous yourself. Brava!Doesn't it suck that we are so oppositional?
    Well, I guess it doesn't suck to bad or we all would not be here. You are beyond. Much thanks.


  • just mercedes gold member
    December 11, 2007

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    good poem, considering the constraint of form, but you went wild with the subject. Why does the world always have to be limited by division? Left and right brain attributes, as listed, can be developed in the other "side" of the brain, like the Eros/Thanatos divide, there is always drifting through, penetration, permeation, becoming. I see the dancer as a rightbrainer, but I have all the left brain attributes as well. Does this mean I am a no-brainer?


    • sultan gold member
      December 11, 2007
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      It's a matter of dominance

      It’s not either, or. Rather it’s just a matter of what side is most natural. If I look at her right after working with numbers for hours, she spins left. Otherwise, I can’t control seeing her go clockwise. Speaking of the Eros/Thanatos divide, I must say I find your pic quite compelling. That we both see her spinning right, and also have the left-brain attributes just means our right is dominant. I have some interest in this because my father was a stroke victim. One thing I’m sure of, you are definitely not a ‘no brainer’. Warm regards, Sultan

  • Virginia Logsdon
    December 11, 2007

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    awesome!

    Yes, we DO get it, when others can't.Sometimes-many times-logic isn't reasonable, and intuition sees all!


  • Jalalbad gold member
    December 11, 2007

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    THIS IS JUST AWESOME. GOOD LUCK IN CONTEST. THIS HAS TO BE A WINNER


  • Darkend
    December 11, 2007

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    Cool

    I always love your poems and this one had a unique flair. Well done. I love the creative edge. Keep up the good work.


  • bigred7330
    December 11, 2007

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    This was really cool... I saw the girl turning anti-clockwise at first, but from the description I am more of a right brainer. I suck at math..good poem.

  • juno0404
    December 11, 2007

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    Loved the poem and the lesson.
    Now I know why I'm no good at Math.
    Mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm,,,,,,,,,,,

    "I left my boyish sailing days behind
    for goals tobacco with caffeine defined"

    Giving up sailing to become a man, doesn't sound like fun.
    You could have chosen to be Peter Pan.
    Good luck in the contest.




  • Klinci3
    December 11, 2007

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    very good

    Hmm I really liked the poem well done

    I've seen the spinning girl thing before and I swear it changes every like 15 seconds or something...otherwise I'm going crazy.

  • lizardking1112
    December 11, 2007

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    Very nice

    I like this a lot. I like how you used the different functions of the brain to create a scenario in which you had to stop depending on one side to start using the other because of "discipline". Its funny how we are brought up to believe in what we believe in, but when it comes down to it our very beliefs are hidden and we spend our lives reinforcing others beliefs. How can we be individuals if we have to do what others tell us to, every day of our lives. I think the world would be much better if we started abandoning the left side and started using more of the right side. In essence " Break on through to the other side".

  • chelmno
    December 11, 2007
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    I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. It is extremely well-written. However: it's 'weird'! :


  • hopeleslytaken
    December 11, 2007

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    Wow.

    That's funny because I just learned about this in psychology. I think it was absolutely wonderful. And it's really like fun. The last line is really fun.


  • orchidfalls
    December 11, 2007

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    Beautiful

    The poem was outstanding.And the rest of the knowledge extremely appreciated .I am totally right brained ,and that clears up so many things .Whew,Thanks.My emotional response was ....I loved it.The form the imagery the everything.


  • wingdreams
    December 11, 2007
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    Definitely clockwise..........left handed, right brained. This combination has gotten me in to many dicussions of what should be logic (or not). There really is a difference in perception.

    Thank you for explaining gybe for I am not a sailor.

    Good writing. Good thoughts!


  • JohnPhilbin
    December 11, 2007
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    kool poem...for the world is forever clockwise in my eyes


  • nichtmich silver member
    December 11, 2007
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    Looking at the bottom 1/2 inch strip, she periodically changes.

  • nichtmich silver member
    December 11, 2007

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    Neurological humor at it's best! Who could resist such a description? I'm glad you explained that she can spin both ways, I thought I was losing it. Or is she timed, getting paranoid here. Will have to time it . Wonderful poem, the complexity of the simplicity of life. Spot on! This should be a serious contender for the gold! Crazy Weird is right! Must bookmark

  • Climbing2nothing
    December 11, 2007

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    lifes a crazy mix of a laugh ain't it? I really enjoyed the polarisations and graceful flow of this, the way i was truly hypnotised (prob 30 seconds before i got to the poem ) and then you had those opening lines and i knew it was going to be good, yet felt it could of gone on alittle longer, other than that, great life imagery/logic interplay, good luck,

    W tea and orange and chocolate browny,
    Jas


  • georgie
    December 11, 2007

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    ermmm... i see both... does that mean im a freak? lol. i see her turning from one way to the other... i love the pic but i love the poem even more. was the poem based on the pic then? i love the wording and the texture behind it. flows beautifully. well worded,
    hugs,
    georgie,
    xxx

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    December 11, 2007

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    Oh my, the poem is written well with good description and imagery.
    The right/left brain test via the dancer is fascinating, I saw her at first alternating dancing in a completely different way,alternating between clockwise and anti clockwise and after reading the author notes focused to control which way she moved as if I were her choreographer and found it possible to consciously choose left/right.
    Whilst left handed people are controlled by the right side of the brain and vice versa there must surely be another category for those who are ambidextrous?
    I was not born ambidextrous but after an accident learned to use the opposite hand for tasks and now naturally use either.
    How fascinating the psychology of neurology is and vice versa.Maybe that's why I ramble incessant thoughts that fast track through my head,maybe they are indeed streaming from both sides lol
    I should like to bookmark this to share with friends if that is o.k.?


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    December 11, 2007

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    I first saw her anti-clockwise

    however my writings are RIGHT BRAIN, that's me alright...could turn her around clockwise easily,
    after I looked away for a moment or so! AS if she
    were never turning the other way, isn't that fun!!

    That was fun, we did this in our poetry group too!
    Excellent poem, and yes...where would be our fond distraction if it were not for optical illusions!
    loved it.
    ears2hearyou
    Kathleen : )) good job poet!! that was fun to
    do again!

  • GarbageCan
    December 11, 2007

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    lol it's going clockwise fo rme I got it to go left for a bit but ohhh well lol either way it's a really really good poem! thank you so much for sharing!

    ~lamia

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