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Once more with feeling

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 The mornings

are pathetic.

 

Waking up alone

to face a new day

is the hardest 

thing.

 

 

 

I often think to myself

I can't do this anymore.

 

 

Then I wonder,

will I see you?

 

 

 I take a huge

gulping breath

one foot reaches the floor

and this body betrays me;

 It wants to live.

 

 

 

Eyes in the mirror

say give up girl

you can't do this,

but again I think

will I see you?

 

 

 

And before I know it

I have showered and dressed.

Life goes on.

 

 

 

I drive down the street

praying I won't hear

that song.

You know which song,

I'm talking about.

 

All the while wondering

am I going to see you today? 

 

 

 

   

 

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  • Utok Bulinaw
    December 18, 2007
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    I like the conversational tone and the emotional honesty of this one. I can relate to this, always wondering if you see the person or not, always caught between giving up and moving on, between letting go or hanging into those invisible threads of hope. Thank you for this entry.


  • Heart Sutra
    December 17, 2007
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    The emotions is very strong in this piece.

    Good luck in the contest


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    December 16, 2007

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    This was absolutely stunning writing. It captured me and I was caught up in your words. I have known these feelings..so I can relate.
    I also love your authors page. Will be reading more of your work.
    Soulful Woman


  • TenShadesOfPale
    December 12, 2007

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    Wow... This expresses a lot. It's really wonderful. It's a great poem and this is what poetry is about, expressing yourself through words. The title has a lot of effect to the entire piece! you are one amazing poet.


  • misselaineous
    December 12, 2007
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    there is light after dark
    dawn always follows night
    this is lovely poetry


  • haikumonk gold member
    December 12, 2007
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    A wonderful poem of fear and hope combined. Well done. Good luck.


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    December 12, 2007

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    Great stuff!!!
    Was drawn to it by the title (Buffy fan)...
    Found myself touched by this sweet, sad and endearing piece...
    Great flow, rhythm and narrative...
    Well done!!!
    keep up the good work...

  • davidwright silver member
    December 11, 2007

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    A nice lament. Sounds like a tribute to a relationship without firm commitments. Thoughtful and provocative


  • artis
    December 11, 2007
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    Blinded by love when one can't see the object of their affection but spend myraid moments wanting too, i have known such mournings, and noons and eves and sympathize greatly. ~~Artis


  • Night Hope gold member
    December 11, 2007

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    "I take a huge
    gulping breath
    one foot reaches the floor
    and this body betrays me;
    It wants to live."

    Such a lovely portrayal of poignant sorrow, enhanced by the subconscious will to survive. I know this feeling well...but it seems to be the empty nights that affect me the most. Mornings, I try not to think too much as I get ready for work. The nights, they haunt. Bless you, Sweetie. Wanda


  • Peteskid gold member
    December 11, 2007

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    i think these are rich words that strike a chord with many, a feeling of something just beyond the fingertips...so very well done...PK


  • Nicolette gold member
    December 11, 2007
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    This is so beautiful in its sadness, Cat... yes, the mornings, the mornings, they are indeed the hardest - and I so echo the words you've written here. It is to face another day and not knowing... Happy to read you again, my friend

    ~ Nicolette


  • tara wilson gold member
    December 10, 2007

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    you take me on such a journey here with you that I have most certainly have been on before...sometimes, it is just the thought of seeing them...we want to, and yet we don't...a beautiful poem...

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