Quiet conversations with puzzled meanings
Words we speak that no one can know
a slight smile to catch my eye
The look of a lover who's already taken
Longing for his touch; unknowing eyes watching
An affair must stay within closed doors
An imagination running wild with thoughts
Of something that is not yours to have
The ground is so appealing
When your challenger is seen
A fight that's already lost
A love that's never to be experienced
An excuse to be closer
that ring that removes better judgment
Clouds my vision with forsaken images
Never to be known but to me
Was that a look of lust from him?
I glance behind me to see her
Despair storms into the room
To look me dead in the face of the green eyed monster
A love existing solely by myself
Is not a love at all
But a painful experience of something
that love should never be
Author notes
''Nuff said.
In a list
A contest entry
- For You I'll Wait Forever by GypsyEyes.
475 points, ended December 16, 2007, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love is more than a four letter word! by Unstoppable.
600 points, ended December 27, 2007, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 100 poems, more points to come! by katie-jo.
900 points, ended January 18, 2008, 42 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
All comments appreciated.
Comments
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EXACTLY how I'm feeling right now! good job
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this is fantastic. very well worded and quite powerful.
wonderful write.
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This is incredibly well worded. Very powerful. And as one who has honestly been in this situation more than once, it's wonderful how well you captured the vagrant feelings of misuse and fake smiles.
Fantastic.
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Wow... like I was saying, even taking all the reasons in the world, sometimes you just can't help how you feel can you?!
Well, I much like the rythm and metaphor in third stanza. The entire piece is clear and real. The conclusion is short and to the point... the right point too for that matter, because despite what I said above, I do believe you do have control over actions!
TC <3 Alex
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I really love this piece. I understand this feeling so much. It is a frustrating and painful feeling, but right now for me it's enough to just be his friend. I quote Charlie Brown: "Nothing quite takes the taste out of peanut butter like unrequited love." It's not really relevant to this poem, but I though of it when I read this. Wonderful piece.
Thank you for entering and all the best in the contest.
Happy New Year!
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Hey thanks for your comment on my poem 'Apart'.
I really like this poem, I can feel the pain and frustration in your words, I think the last verse is particularly powerful. Excellent write =]
Hannu xxx -
yay me
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It was sweet and somewhat seductive yet wierd at the same time. You do a good job at creating a mix of emotions. Well done!
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I did like this poem but I feel it could have flowed better good luck in the contest.
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Wow. I can think of nothing more to say,
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Wow
That's all I can say is WOW! So full of emotion and so true. I've been there myself and it hurts like hell. You are an amazing poet, speaking from your heart and letting your true feelings flow. Amazing, totally amazing!
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i absolutely love you for writing this! you have taken everything my heart needed to say and penned it down beautifully..props to you..
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how sad and yet how true that we all experience it so differently, and so it always seems we are so alone in it... i thought you did this one really well, it conveys a lot....
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Judge Says
I really liked this. You have such a longing in it and then to come to realize that the love is one sided...well this was just plain good! thank you for entering and good luck!
~Dommi
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