She closed her eyes tight, wishing she was dead,
Instead of laying on that cold stale bed.
Her father had shouted, her mother had screamed,
Life was just harder than what it had seemed.
She made one mistake and everything goes wrong,
The wait in that room just seemed way too long.
Footsteps then occupied that cold clean room,
Her life was going to change with a boom.
She took a deep breath, then she opened her eyes,
Wishing what the nurse said was just some more lies.
Her hand on her stomach, she walked out the door,
Hoping that someday, her son will have more.
A contest entry
- Cold Regret by DesolatELifE.
689 points, ended December 15, 2007, 29 entries
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Comments
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omg. this is soooo powerful.. the ending...the way you wrote it...breath taking. i loved it. fantastic write! =] great job!
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a wonderful poem. I'm really awful at commenting on poems.. so just know that I think this is great! thanks for entering
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