Two are lost
A moment of instinct, a moment of weakness
Ended everything
Trying to avoid
Trying to escape
Two are lost
Accidentally life was snapped
Purposely life was rejected
Ended everything
Author notes
a loose villanelle. two people i know died recently.
Please tell me what you think
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I was close to them. Though I didn't see them as much as I liked. Two completely unrelated deaths by two people who had never met in one month. Awful and odd. Thankyou for the nice comments
xx
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This is a damn good write. It makes me wonder if you were close with the two of them. I like the second line perhaps the best because of it's honesty. People tend to drown their emotions in metaphor and it distorts the subject material. This is good though... I am just sorry for your loss.
Thank you, as always, for the share and your gracious comments.
-Shae Lynn
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