A song of loneliness
escaped her lips
like involuntary gasps
of troubled breathing,
sounds that climbed
to conscious hearing;
carried nuance ~
a subtle stabbing of air;
it seemed so out of place
from a face of such
well defined confidence,
eyes that did not flinch
beneath a determined stare.
She spoke words of confession,
habits and character traits
bricks in a wall of distance;
meticulous, meant to endure,
and how I’d stumbled upon
so rare a moment of weakness.
She rolled from facing
bedroom wall, to show
her stony in-expression, resumption
of a well trodden act;
minutes removed
echoes of moan filled moments
tastes of near-oblivion
still in the breath we shared;
she was gone,
back to heartache.
And I would have to break fingernails
in brick and mortar, again.
In a list
A contest entry
- who is the singer? by Zayra Yves.
1750 points, ended December 17, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This poem has some mystery inside of it. I find myself wondering who "she" is? This is well written and I appreciate the quality of your writing. There is a sense of elegance to everything you write...even sad things are pretty somehow when you write them.
Who is the poem dedicated to?
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this is very lovely, sadly, I can so relate to this...
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You are one of a kind, always - a beautiful soul.
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thank you...Melissa
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This is breathtaking! The mark of any successful writer is the ablity to write something so personal, yet make the theme so universal, that any stranger who reads it feels as if it was written for and about him. You have captured my personality here . . . as a perfect stranger to you . . . you have reflected such a stunning glimpse into the heart of 'confidently proud, previously hurt' woman. Beautiful, poet!
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Thank you Lilith-
i think we all have this within us in some form, the sense of an unresolved hurt; and there may be someone trying to help...thank you so much for your kind and generous words...PK
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I really like the image of 'eyes that did not flinch beneath a determined stare'. The layers there are impeccable.
But then again, so is the rest of the imagery... you never cease to amaze. I know, I'm a broken record - but in that regard, so are you
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Thank you Keyser-
for reading and taking the time to let me know... really very much appreciated...PK
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