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Broken Butterflies

Porcelain figurines smile sympathetically,
Synthetic tears roll from my tainted eyes;
screaming in agony while shattering to peices.
Lying in a field of broken butterflies.

Wilted roses laced within barbedwire;
intoxicating air filling my broken lungs.
Here and there, rage and regret collide,
Just to know, that my last song, it has been sung.

Faked smiles encase my breaking spirit;
tainting my youth with every breathe that I dare take.
Close my eyes, this nightmare, it has won,
My stainedglass heart, it is at stake.

Stitches ribbon between creases of glass,
Holding together something, that is so, so very torn.
How long, how long will I have to hide?
My thoughts, my body, my spirit; they are worn.

Scars within the blue and black markings,
An instrument, used to inflict his deadly rage;
just another shattered star,
In the fetal position, right there, on center stage.

All of those synthetic tears that they are shredding,
All of the sympathetic smiles they use;
my body is broken, my innocence, it has been taken,
Shadowing behind a newformed bruise.

So I fall into the emptiness I call my own,
Darkness, it consumes every bit of my soul.
Stainedglass hearts, they come crashing,
Never did anybody know.

When I look into the darkened sky of my world;
where day is as dark as night,
When porcelain dolls stare and smile.
I lay in a feild of broken butterflies.

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  • Candy Morphine
    November 15, 2008
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    the wording and everything is just, breath-taking.
    woah


  • Candy Morphine
    November 15, 2008
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    UBELIEVEABLE.

    this is,, awe-inspiring!!!!

    i LOVE it!!


  • ultimate beluga
    August 4, 2008
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    i like this, its nicely written, interstingly metaphorical, good imagery too. however, i do think its a little long, and im not sure the rhyming is really neccesary. also, some parts were a little cliche, but still well-written, and truly emotional enough for that to not really be a problem.
    very emotional piece, that aspect was excellent.
    thanks heaps for entering!


  • takemypainaway
    March 11, 2008

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    very metaphorical

    and nicly written

    very well penned poem

    thank you for entering!!

    **kat


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    January 9, 2008

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    Great imagery to this piece. It's a tad long, but I think you have made your point well and kept my attention. Very nice done ideed


  • O.o
    December 23, 2007

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    I just love the creativity this poem shows. This one stood out to me. well done and thanks for entering!


  • noiseandkisses
    December 14, 2007

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    oh my

    this is amazingly written, it reminds me of my favorte evanescence song "immaginary".
    The imagery of this poem is incredible, i love it.
    you're just such an amazing writer i'm gonna have to give you 3 applaudes for being amazing.
    -alana<33


  • ImUrFadingMemory
    December 11, 2007

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    Very impressed this was written jsut at the time... mine didn't turn out half as good as yours! You definatly captured the feel or it all... and it flows very well. And most importantly it is very descriptive. It's like you broke through the feelings or 'unexplainable' and most of all--- 'unheard voices'
    i think with description in a way you definatly make it heard!!! Great job! I was wondering do you mind if I bookmark it? Yes, it's that good
    I like the ending corresponding with the first stanza... with the title... ugh i just realized the stupid suggestion thing below that keeps saying any other ideas about how the poem could improve? NOOOOOOOO!!!!! lol ok sorry this is really long and I'm wasting your time, just trying to show some appreciation but making it too long
    Great Write I'm impressed! Might go check out more of your stuff even. thanks for sharing this piece.... words only i wish i could have spoken, but you did it for me... and the others...
    thanks
    ~Madison~


  • Dead Star--x
    December 11, 2007

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    youve left me breathless
    and speechless
    holy crap this is just that good...
    x]
    Dead Star--x
    i feel crappy for the bad comment but im just in awe

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