It all starts when you walk the sidewalk
Cement colored like a hospital hall
And suddenly you're smiling.
(But I just need to let go.
And then it's just an old world
And then she's crying for you
There's no end like that.
Oh, she wants you home so bad.)
It all starts when you feel the sky
Sandy like the tired warm scratch in the air
And suddenly it's flying again.
(And I just need to be there
Holding the eagle-wing stripes in your skin
Holding the feathers in your hair.
There's no end like that.)
It all starts when you walk the sidewalk
And get lost in a brown-sugar storm
And a key turns somewhere.
(They say don't be tired;
There are hearts drawn in the sand
And festivals in the air.)
A contest entry
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Comments
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'hearts drawn in the sand
And festivals in the air.'
You have created some great pictures and the poem flows very nicely along with good language.
I like it - it was worth allowing the PW's.
Many thanks and good luck in my contest. -
Thanks for entering my contest.
This was a very nice write indeed,
I liked the use of the parentheses,
it gave it off kinda
of the writer thinking
many different things
yet holding on to the main thought.
Good work.
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I enjoyed this - intriguing work. Thanks for enterinng and good luck
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This is really good
Keep on writing, yes? -
Hi, Interesting lyrics
I didn't really get the main theme of this piece. If I know what you have in mind, I might be able to help with the rhyme. Thanks for posting this in the reading list of Songwriters and Poets for Song Collaboration.
Please try to read some of the other lyrics in our reading list.
Andy
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"Holding the eagle-wing stripes in your skin
Holding the feathers in your hair." that is a peaceful thought, fer reel.. i love it.. so surreal.
Thank you so much For the entry.
-Emily-
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it's good very good keep writing
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you have a lot of talent, great poem.thanks for entering and good luck!
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Thank you for sharing
I love that you were so creative
I wish you the best of luck in this contest! -
The imagery in this was great. Well done and the best of luck in the contest
In my contest it's one sentence off but it's alright.
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