Echo falls in a gentle Summer rain,
descending from the stars.
Her tears cling to vibrant flower petals,
trying to kiss them as if
they were the lips of Narcissus
(Her dream lives for a few
precious moments, but suddenly
dies as gravity slowly
takes over.)
Author notes
Love is a downpour: Love is fast and hard, a shower of tears; it can make you grow or it can drown you.
there are also some precious moments, like roses in the rain...but love and physics do not agree, and love is left unrequited
this poem = a merging of mythology and physics and a zillion other things.
written December 10, 2007
please tell me about the mistakes!
In a list
A contest entry
- Almost Perfect by Kaleidoscopeyes.
800 points, ended December 14, 2007, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is beautiful... it has a personal tone to it that I think is missing from your later pieces (I'm not saying that it is a good thing or a bad thing - just pointing it out
)... I love your take on mythology, I think that it adds such a deeper meaning to your poems - wonderful, and congratulations on the gold!
Keep writing
Polly
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jesusss.
i cant choose what emotion to feel in this piece. but its one hellofawicked im blown away kind of feeling.
favorite write by you, fdshakfd.
and thats all i have to/can say <33
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lol, thanks so much for the comment!!!
<3
LXF
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