I am in love
with what you used to be
not what you are
now.
I wish I'd had
the sense
to bottle you up,
savor the taste,
before you dried up,
and the last drop
was wasted,
on some pitiful girls
who won't remember
your name
in a couple years.
But I'll remember
and...
I won't forget
the way you
tore my life apart
and left shattered
the dreams
I was stupid enough
to share with you.
I won't forget
the way your eyes
went hazy
with a bottomless hunger
just
before I kissed you.
I won't forget
the way you stared
right into my soul
and told me
you loved me.
What a pathetic lie.
I approached you
with the best
intentions
but you came to me
with hopes
like a cancer
that rotted me
from the inside out.
My heart's going to implode
from all the lies
and all the tears
you made me cry.
You say I'll be
better off without you,
I'll take you up
on that offer,
but I think I'm getting
the bargain.
Author notes
...
theres nothing left I can say.
A contest entry
- All Sorts of Options; prewrites welcome by DramaQueen469.
380 points, ended October 16, 2008, 24 entries
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Learning heart...
Romantically emotional... "Heartless Bargain" sings its true moments of reason, and shows a heart that is maturing. I like it.
In respect and admiration,
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
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wow
this has got to be one of my favorite writes I've came across, mostly because i can relate but the way you wrote each line was beautiful
I wish I'd had
the sense
to bottle you up,
savor the taste,
before you dried up,
and the last drop
was wasted,
- your a brilliant writer, and im just basing that off this write.
this is definitely bookmarked.
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Remarkable.
I salute you.
Well done and good luck! -
I love this. Once again, I can relate to this soo much, like every word. I feel like I've been through the exact same thing. I love the way that this is so full of emotion. I can really feel the pain here. Wonderful write.
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wow.... Ive got nothing to say except this is beautiful... great job!
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Straight from the heart!
Very powerful write - had me feeling like I was there with you, took me back to many years ago when I had a "bad" love. I think most people will be able to empathise completely with you and I wish you well. Take care, Marian. x
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i really like this poem. ...im speachless ..great write
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You're right...no messing,laying it all on the line. Time to cleanse the soul and rebuild the heart that has been broken, without thought-a 'laid bare' write at it's best.
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