One trace of your fingers, touching mine
I'm cold as steel and just as silent
Devoid of a single utterance
in this single two places
One touch of your hands, grazing mine
Locking me up in your embrace,
freeing me from this world, and
letting me go back again
One graze of your lips, sweeping mine
Heart stops. Knees drop. Utter shock.
Play it cool, something witty, this is
just a fantasy anyway. I will remember truth this time.
One sweep of your arms, holding mine
I fall awake. Never ending war to remain.
But to sleep, to neglect all for what I hate,
to dream and plummet from what I think I thought?
Please tell me what you think
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dreamy
it's sensual and romantic...i especially LOVE the last two sections (begining at 'one graze' til the end). keep it up...you're doing good -
I like this. I like the way it flows and the word choice. Perhaps, in the way of naming, it could be something simple. A single word that sticks out to you. Perhaps Fantasy, Dream, Sleep, something like that?
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4th time read. I find the flow well done and the fantasy real. Nicely written, now all we need is a title,and I have no suggestions. hmmm. best left in your hands as I have enuf problems with my own.
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