So, is this what it is like,
To have no hope,
No understanding,
Nothing to feel,
To comfort you?
Will it always be this way,
Angry thoughts clouding my
Vision?
Does hope always
Get swallowed,
Sucked into a dimension
Where it is not needed?
Hope is gone,
Hope is lost,
Unless
We feel
It
Once
More.
Author notes
My word was 'swallow', not 'hope' as you might have thought. I am eleven, just wanted to say that to help with the judging. Good luck everyone!
A contest entry
- Welcome to My Word...Won't you come on in 2 by RuthKephart.
600 points, ended December 18, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please critique- I can take truthful comments...
Comments
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I really like this poem it is understandable
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What a great job you did with your word prompt. Perhaps 11 by age but you are far more mature than your years. It takes some of us, me included, much longer to come to the realizations that you have come to in your words
I love the title you chose for this piece, as the other comment states, it drew me in. I'm going to check out some of your other work. Thank you for this entry and best wishes in the contest
Ruth
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first, I was totally drawn in by the title, it's spectacular! Then, I was amazed by the emotion you poured into this. I've seen poetry in the kid's section before whose writer attempted to write stuff like this, but failed. You succeeded! I love it!
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