I have not forgotten the way, but a little.
I waited in the blue to lie there, and be still—
refusing to mourn the Winter, and how one
is so much like another. Something was burning
in the sky but that was so far above
I barely had to blink to clear it from the lens.
And under,
the cold was a Kingly comfort— tender hands
poised in the green growths; benign water-princes
that will spread until the water silences their songs—
Years and years ago you might have been here too,
there is always someone that spoils things.
Author notes
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In a list
A contest entry
- snowflakes and icicles and numb little hands by Annalise.
2000 points, ended December 26, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is my favorite one I love reading your poems.
♥Sara♥
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this is so lovely♥
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The way those last two lines read in a whisper... now, that's pure poetry.
Damn good poetry here. An amazing use of the contest prompt. An amazing use of natural talent.
Good one.
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Thanks Meli.. merry christmas.. xxxx
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I really like this one..
"And under,
the cold was a Kingly comfort— tender hands
poised in the green growths; benign water-princes
that will spread until the water silences their songs—"
beautiful poetry..
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Beautiful and benign in its alluding to sorrow
and the passing of things. Excellent read to take
in and ponder the many layers. Blue
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incredible!
this is beautifully composed... very strong imagery and metaphor! wonderfully well written!
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Oh. This is a great little poem that you have going on here. I really like it. It makes me feel all cold and like I need to go put on a nice pair of fuzzy socks. lol I enjoyed the lines about spreading out princes beneath the water. It was really pretty and kind of mysterious. I don't really know what you're alluding to really with the last two lines but they sure sound good.
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i like this- beautifly written and lovingly wrote
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Wonderfully done. You understand this poetry thing huh? - well, for those readers who might miss the subtleties ... it's all in the metaphor people! - not ten dollar words or complicated language. This is so very pure.
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Thanks Kate- It's inspired by Ophelia.. x
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This would have worked in the blue door contest too.
Really beautifully image within the shade of blue and winter.
Glad to see a new pome from you
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Brilliant, I miss you when your away~
excellent take on the prompt, my friend. Love those last lines.
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i remember having the water babies read to me as a tot, little knowing then that it was such a moral satirical story
this has lovely imagery and feels so sad at the end
charles kingsley created great names for his characters - mrs doasyouwouldbedoneby...
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Thankyou Elaine. I've actually never read it
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