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A Plan of Attack: winter’s onslaught

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There is a frigid
damp wind
pushing
at my front door

howling,
testing like
it had to even
a score because
autumn
dared to linger.

Every nook,
every cranny
is stressed like
a young boy
doing his best to
blow air
into a crumpled
paper bag but

I do not worry
because I know that
as winter
begins to show I

can find solace
in the fire’s
warm embrace.

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  • luna-midnight gold member
    February 13

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    awwww this is so lovely, and gt to love the fire in winter time =). and wnter is so beautiful, eh?
    lovely poem
    stephanie =)


  • Shamanicmusings gold member
    January 2
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    This has beautiful imagery to match the picture that goes with it.

  • Cat gold member
    December 26, 2007

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    one of your best michael- you are really exploring using imagery and bringing new life to your words- i like the direction of this piece very much-
    thanks so much for entering

    m

  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    December 14, 2007

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    Beautiful. Really beautiful. I love the way you've personified winter in this. You made it live and breathe for me.

    Thanks so much for entering and good luck in the contest.




  • waydownuponjoy
    December 12, 2007

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    Excellent use ...

    of imagery and written in a nice form of free verse where poetic devices help the thoughts flow along. A great way to conquer all in your ending and what peace a fireside can bring. Howl on wind ... joy


  • Luna Tique Fringe gold member
    December 11, 2007

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    "damp wind
    pushing
    at my front door

    howling,
    testing like
    it had to even
    a score because
    autumn
    dared to linger."

    Wow..love those lines..in my humble opinion, I think they could stand alone.


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    December 11, 2007

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    ...because Autumn dared to linger. Oh how well I know this. GREAT line, and that waiting to explode feeling... very good. I enjoyed this a great deal. LOVE your image as well, reminds me of growing up in the frosty frigid. ~Pamela


  • Dalaney gold member
    December 10, 2007

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    I think this poem is your best...so far.
    You have so much inside...so much poetry,
    I can only wait for them like a child
    waiting for desert Love, Lane


  • LittleMoon silver member
    December 10, 2007

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    If there is one thing you understand more than most, it is the might of winter. Even where you live there is that welcoming fire of home that makes it bearable on body and soul.

  • Bad Bill
    December 10, 2007
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    Very atmospheric and with no wasted words--a delight to read.
    Bill


  • Olivia33
    December 10, 2007
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    Very Good

  • goalsv
    December 10, 2007

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    Very welle done. I like the theme of winter coming in because here we just this last week had are first real taste of winter. You captured the feeling of the weather.
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