Her life's always moving
In and out of the country
Made many new friends
But she had to leave them behind again
Sitting in her family car
With an atmosphere so tense
Heartbeat thumping faster with the growing distance
But she looks up at the sky
And the gentle clouds rolling by
Seem to tell her she's going to be alright.
Author notes
OPTION 7
A contest entry
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Comments
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Hello great poem here. I want to wish you good luck in the contest.
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Good job! I found 1 typo: Seating in her family car should be sitting in her family car. I can feel the emotions that person is going through. Good job and good luck in the contest.
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thanks
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A pleasure
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i can feel the tenseness and frustration in this piece and it's so hard to deal with that kind of thing i can tell you that because almost 3 years ago, i pulled this lady up from her roots and all she ever knew to move over 2,500 miles away. i can say that i love the way this poem ended optimistic because like with my daughter, in time, everything was indeed alright
thanks for entering and good luck. be well and be blessed
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sad
man this poem was so sad! But somehow it seemed comforting too... your last few lines were brilliant! You have great imagery! and i love this poem... Best of luck in the contest dear..
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wow!
very nice imagery here and it reminded me of another poem you had written. this poem has a feeling of hope to it. best of wisehs in the contest!
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poem of youth
Here gentility overcame a youthful tenseness as the sun beats down on lifes moves,,,i liked this approach..
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