Looking out into the world
Makes me feel extremely small.
Sometimes,
I even feel lost in this gigantic world.
Looking out into the desert,
Makes me think of myself.
I keep to myself a lot
And my anger heats things up...
Considerably a lot!
Soon, I find a lone tree.
I stand next to it,
And think of myself.
I'm almost always independent
But my friends will help me on occasion.
That is when I see a ton of little lizards.
They stay in the shade of the tree.
So it is really not all alone,
As I am not alone.
The rain comes,
And the breeze is soothing
And lets me relax.
The storm itself
Is full of electricity,
As I am full of sadness and anger.
The lightning lets the electricity
Crackle through the air.
My anger crackles through the air
When I scream at my family.
My friends and my poetry calm me down,
Just as the wind calms the storm,
And takes it to a different place.
As I stand on the barren ground
Looking out into the desert,
I relate my life to everything.
But when I look down again,
And see the tree
Relfected in the puddles of rain,
And watch the lizards come scurrying out,
I'm really not on barren ground.
Just as I'm really not alone.
Author notes
This is option #5 and it was actually very inspirational. And it is another one of my better poems. although it started out a bit rocky, i think it got so much better by the end...
for the other contest: "Grand Theft Autumn"
This was inspired by a picture of a lone tree in the middle of what looked like a desert. I don't remember which contest i got the pic from to inspire this poem, and i don't know where the person found it. i can't put pictures on my poems, so i'm sorry you couldn't see it - that's how most of my other poems are except the "Climbing My Love" one... sorry
Koko
A contest entry
- Your Best Prewrite 2 by Heavenly Angel.
450 points, ended December 10, 2007, 39 entries
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1800 points, ended February 26, 2008, 120 entries
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700 points, ended December 21, 2007, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - everything and anything by x Bright Eyes x.
525 points, ended February 4, 2008, 84 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pimp up my picture inspired poetry by leander.
400 points, ended January 31, 2008, 46 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~ pre-writes ~ by LadyUnique.
300 points, ended May 8, 2008, 61 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
How did you like it? Anything to fix?
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i like the message in your write, that we really aren't alone... sometimes we're just so down that we can't see our blessings
thank you for entering and good luck
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This poem has some great imagery inside the lines and I actually do like that I would have preferred a way to have a peek at the picture myself, but that's not such a big deal
thank you for entering the contest - I wish you the best of luck!
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Great job. I really liked this one because I could really relate to it. This poem was moving and very true. Best of Luck and Happy Holidays.
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That is very interesting. I like it and i do believe it IS one of the better poems you've written. And the longest. Way too go.
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A fine sharing this is
I like how you convey your thoughts and feelings within the lines of your poetry
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Good reflective narrative. I like the way the reader is led through the different feelings, reaction and resoloutions the poet describes. Has a good, firm steadiness to it along with some unusual scenarios.
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