The puzzle pieces to my life
Is all messed up, some missing
Not all the pieces are in the package
Yet you somehow put me back together
And see my picture crystal clear
I’m a host of total imperfection
But you see through all my flaws
And find potential in every flaw
To others I’m a confused soul
But in your eyes I’m a queen
You catch me when I fall
Accept my flaws and all of me
You put up with my nonsense
And try to colour my dull grey life
I don’t know why you love me
Don’t understand why you fell for me
Don’t get what you saw in me
But whatever it is, you truly love me
And that’s exactly why I love you
Author notes
Beauty of silence
A contest entry
- Invite For... HM winners Judged by RedwingSpirit.
475 points, ended April 7, 2008, 46 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Why do you love? by wondering.willow.
407 points, ended February 6, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I have definitly felt like this!! This is a beautiful write! The ending was my favorite!! :-)
Keep up the great writes*
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I love it, it's so true to how I have felt in the past. I never understand why people fall in love with me.
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cute right,
but not exactly what i looking for.
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Beautiful write, lil sis. I think we've all felt something this once or twice in our lives. And sometimes, it lasts forever and ever.
Wirte on. One.
Dez
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it's amazing how all your poems relate so well to me...maybe that's why i love them so much. you are a very talented writer, that's for sure
I don’t know why you love me
Don’t understand why you fell for me
Don’t get what you saw in me
But whatever it is, you truly love me
And that’s exactly why I love you
it's like you know me and you're writing about me... -
I have a poem with a similar title it's called "Why I Care". The life of your poem gave me a smile! God bless
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this is very beautiful (im starting to sound repeditive...lol.) love isnt about whats wrong with the person and accepting the flaws, its about not seeing the flaws in the person because they are the perfect one for you, the soul mate.
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aww this was cute! we all wish we find someone who makes us feel this way.
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Great write. Can relate to this lol. Thank you for taking the time to enter this poem into my contest I wish you the best of luck make sure you check the other 4 contests for your name as well.
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i love this poem! i understand...thank you for the beautiful piece. I really injoyed reading this poem. It reminded me of myself and my ex. thank you
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touching
i like the way you say that he fell for you and dont care about your improfections that is the way true love should be, good luck on your contests, and keep writing -Amy
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I don’t know why you love me
Don’t understand why you fell for me
Don’t get what you saw in me
But whatever it is, you truly love me
Beautiful brilliance. Best of luck in contest.
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You catch me when I fall
Accept my flaws and all of me
You put up with my nonsense
And try to colour my dull grey life
this is good and I liked it
keep up the good work and I
wish you the best in this -
wow, this was really romantic (:
liked the 2nd stanza, how he accepts you for who you are..
and the most wonderful thing is that you're my age! we can so relate, sister~!
best of luck (: -
This sounds like an absolutely wonderful romance, one that I could certainly feel through this poem!
Thanks for entering! -
thank you.
thank you for putting the right information in because it pains me to think i might have missed a poem as beautiful as this one. this is an exquisite example of teenage love, it makes me want to weep in joy for you and at fourteen none the less. its wonderful. thank you so much for everything and the best of luck in my contest.
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This is a beautiful poem with a beautiful message. So many people have found themselves fully loved when they don't even know how to love themselves. It's a wonderful, uplifting feeling when you feel scattered but someone can somehow knows you well enough to pull it all together. It takes a very important and strong person to pull that off, and a smart person to realize when they have someone who can do that in their life.
One typo I noticed was in the first stanza.
The first 2 lines say...
"The puzzle pieces to my life
Is all messed up, some missing"
However, puzzle pieces are plural and "is" is a singular verb. So the lines should say,
"The puzzle pieces to my life
Are all messed up, some missing"
Also, you used the word flaw a lot, which is fine, it just feels a little repitive after a while.
I really liked the lines,
"I’m a host of total imperfection
But you see through all my flaws"
I've felt that and it just makes your heart float when you feel it. You think there is nothing good about you, but somehow someone loves you and it makes you feel special again. Important.
And of course the last stanza was beautiful...
"I don’t know why you love me
Don’t understand why you fell for me
Don’t get what you saw in me
But whatever it is, you truly love me
And that’s exactly why I love you"
I've been there and I love it! -
could you please re-read the rules to my contest, you seem to have forgotten something.
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I wish there was more people in this world who can see past peoples flaws. This is so well written. All I can say is if you find someone like this in your young age hold onto them, who knows when another will come around. best of luck to you. thanks for entering
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OH MY
This is such a lovely poem, one of your best love writes yet.
"I’m a host of total imperfection
But you see through all my flaws"
It's truly amazing how you expressed yourself with such a good flow..
I
this and best of luck in the contest!
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