she dosen't move
doesn't breathe,
can't fight back
or protest
limp, lifeless,
empty eyes
stare straight ahead,
unfeeling and cold
bones rattle
with every thrust,
rotting flesh,
the stench of death
does he know
(does he care)
it's only a corpse
he's fucking?
Author notes
It's a metaphor.
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I can't believe I've not commented on this before! Every time I read this poem I love it... you're so right. The metaphor is brilliant and so true.
Powerful, painful write.
It's done brilliantly
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Great write on such a ...cold topic. Its raw, emotive, powerful. The message is loud and clear. Fantastic write.
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So well written. It's cold and raw and dark and I'm so sorry for you having to go through this. I too know what it's like. I just hope that you're ok now and safe. Well done for having the power to write. x
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I just want to wrap you up in the biggest protective duvet-thing I can get my hands on. You're brave to write and I really hope it helped. This reminded me of the quote fom Les Miserables "Don't they know they're making love to one already dead". It's like that, but colder and more raw.
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Things always seem more "deep" when put metaphorically... you had no problem getting the message across!
Well done
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And a metaphor I understand.
Well done.
Gr8 work for a horrible topic..
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