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Three sides of me

When I look in the mirror all I see is a mother, woman and child looking back at me.
First is the mother so strong and steady, never to be moved.
Then comes the woman who steps so timidly.
Last there's the child who no one ever sees.

The mother walks proudly for all to see.
The woman thinks twice before any one can see.
Yet the child I hide so no one will know,
the fear that's hidden that will never show.

The mother is shown for all to see.
The woman is a softer side of me.
Then comes the child the mirror image of what I see.

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  • catz Moderators member
    October 23, 2008

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    Very good The facets of a woman clearly visualized in this nice piece

    Thank you for entering

    Dee


  • B Chandler
    March 20, 2008

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    Apologies

    I'm truly sorry but your entry will be removed as it goes over the ten line limit. Although you have a good poem which I liked very much, the rules are stated in concrete. Again, I am sorry

  • phoenixonfire
    March 19, 2008

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    I like this write! Its emotional and deep and has long lasting impact on my mind!!

    Thanks for entering and good luck!

    pri...


  • N e a r
    February 3, 2008
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    This is a brilliant write. You explain the 3 aspects of yourself so delicately and clearly, and I understood everything you were saying... Straight to the point, but deeper than just surface words.
    Nicely penned!

    Thanks for sharing & entering my contest A N Y T H I N G ~ G O E S ! Good luck!

    M a r l u x i a


  • aligurl
    January 6, 2008

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    I loved this poem. The way you depicted all three sides.

    "The mother is shown for all to see.
    The woman is a softer side of me.
    Then comes the child the mirror image of what I see. "

    I know what it's like not to be seen. The only thing that I have to say about this, is the use of the word 'see.' I don't know if that was intentional but you used it three lines in a row and it kind of threw me off the poem. I had to re read that part to get it because around there it lost the flow and it took a sec for my mind to catch it. However that was made up by the absolutley perfect ending. Good luck and thanx for entering.


  • AnotherFace
    December 11, 2007
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    The only bone I have to pick with this is the black font. It made it just a liiiiittle hard to read.
    Other than that. I loved this whole thing. Especially the ending "Then comes the child the mirror image of what I see."

    Fabulous. =]
    Thank you for entering!

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