Corpse by day, I’m full of unnatural life.
A parasite in sunlight
I exist in shadow and entrenched in night.
Like an inverted sphere, a negative rainbow or the deafening resonance of embittered silence.
Reminded with every beautiful sound & angelic smile, that you are nothing but a splinter in my eye.
Consistently leading me into the past
With footsteps of imprinted sweat on glass.
Predestined horror, astrology said you would come; and I realize that you are but one link in this chain piercing my vulnerabilities - opening my veins.
My chivalric demise inscribed on sewer walls.
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So... this is love.
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Nearing another dusk, I'm sensing worms in lust
Smiling - at the scent of my organic canvas.
With open arms I welcome the rain, though lament it’s failure to remove all pang.
Yet still I stand... wavering to their lullabye, under a new raven sky.
Red is the day, as red is the night.
A severed finger and no mourning ring,
Officially dead - all my dreams (of you and me)
With unfathomable anguish
I exist -
- to test the boundaries of suffering.
By: Jaye Eryk
Copyright © 2007
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I really enjoyed reading your poem! It shows great talent, and it is extreamly different from what I've been receiving in this contest so far.
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A very unique style and deep write.
"Corpse by day, I’m full of unnatural life.
A parasite in sunlight
My chivalric demise inscribed on sewer walls.
With unfathomable anguish
I exist -
- to test the boundaries of suffering."
Some of my favorite lines. Thank you for entering this into my contest.
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this is great...and deep i love it
good job and good luck
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Jesus. This was really good, and I'm not sure which lines I should address first--the one I loved, or the other one I loved? XD
"Corpse by day, I’m full of unnatural life.
A parasite in sunlight"
I know this poem isn't about vampires, but it's vampires that came to mind anyways. I really liked the phrasing "unnatural life", and using the word parasite is guaranteed coolness.
"I exist in shadow"
Pretty, simple, and pretty simple. =) Loved this line.
"negative rainbow"
I love the metaphor behind this.
"So...this is love"
Funny, in a wry sort of way.
"-to test the boundaries of suffering."
That doesn't sound very fun, but it's a very nice way to end your poem, which was truly awesome. =)
& thanks so much for visiting my page and reading one of my poems. =)
Jessica
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WOW!!!! you blew me away
this was totally amazing
and breath taking all in one.
Exquisitely penned
Roses to you, ENCORE!!!
Teresa
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Oh wow
You're always able to capture my attention from the first till the last word...sadness and dark all over,it feels like entering your mind...
It's true...we exist to test the boundaries of suffering...over and over again I think...
And still no end in sight...
Loved it,
take care,
another flu is on it's way over here
XXJeannette
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this is incredible and beautiful in a saddening and dark way - thought provoking... a deeply affecting write... I was unable to select a portion or line that I like best because the piece is so strong as a whole... there is truth and reality to this... a very human element... I love the way this piece is formatted, as well, in such a way that it gives the reader time to reflect, perhaps even inspires one to do so, after each and every single, separate line...
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This is amazing. Really. I didn't blink
the entire time I was reading. I agree with
everything QueentakesJack says below me...
now, deflate your head and come over
Love, Lane
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ummm, this is one of the best poems i have read on this website. the form is amazing and really compliments the vivid imagery and perfect use of words. i love everything about this, and im literally at a loss for words. you have some wicked talent, stunning write.. im definitely looking forward to m,ore of your work.
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